Governments should not have to provide care or financial support for elderly people because it is the responsibility of each person to prepare for retirement and support him or herself To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

Essay topics:

Governments should not have to provide care or financial support for elderly people because it is the responsibility of each person to prepare for retirement and support him or herself.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

The senior citizens should be received health care and financial support from the state. While I accept that this may suit many people, I believe that these elderly need to be responsible for their retirement by themselves.

On the one hand, Since old people devote their life and strength to the development of the country and when they get old, they lose the ability to work. This means that their chance of employment is lower, compared to the younger generation. As a result, they country needs to be responsible by providing monthly subsidy to the old people for maintaining their life. Next, In order to show the value , the quality and the appreciation of the country to every citizen, especially the old generations, the state support is a must. This means that this country has a high living standard and everyone in the society is taken care of.

On the other hand, the older citizens should prepare before they stop working because they don’t want to be dependent on others. If they save up money before they retire, they can support themselves and do whatever they want such as travelling, cooking or taking up new hobbies. In addition, by doing some light work which contain less physical involvement like guards or florist, they can contribute to country even after retiring.

In conclusion, it is certainly true that the government should financially support and care for the elderly but the seniors still have to be accountant for their life after retirement.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (2 votes)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, still, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1238.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.952 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59724901563 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 374.4 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.4828707799 49.4020404114 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 112.545454545 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7272727273 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228955424481 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0937464607127 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785016192168 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171426028133 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0893489870525 0.056905535591 157% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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