My Self

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My Self

My name is sarjo. I was born in brebes. Since child until now live in brebes. My home at jl.makam rt.05/04. I live with my father. I am is poor human,because i haven’t work.Therefore i haven’t money. But now i live in pare for study english and i ever worked in japan as sailor.

My family is big family. My father’s years old is 70 and my mather is death. I have 8 brother, 5 brother and 2 sister, last young brother is boy. He is study in high school of tekhnik. My old brother is work in jakarta as driver,they are married and my fisrt sister have 5 child.

I like foot ball as my hobby, why I like football, because football is popular in the world and football make me healthy. In the world many football club,like inter milan,barcelona and other. In indonesia the best football is arema malang and persipura. Cristhian ronaldo is the best player football in the world. Why i know football, because football is my hobby.

My plan for next year is I want hard work for geting success. Therefore, I will study from experience to better life. Without hard work we cannot reach my dream. I will give to the better for my family. I will join with australia company to next time .

My according the life is choice,to get the better result. That is why we must allways try it.

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Average: 6.5 (2 votes)
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Sentence: I am is poor human,because i haven't work.Therefore i haven't money.
Description: The tag a verb 'to be', present tense, 1st person singular is not usually followed by is
Suggestion: Refer to am and is
Description: A Single quote is not usually followed by an adjective, superlative
Suggestion: Refer to ' and t

Sentence: But now i live in pare for study english and i ever worked in japan as sailor.
Description: The fragment i live in is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace live with verb, past participle
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to study and english

Sentence: My father's years old is 70 and my mather is death.
Description: The fragment years old is is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace old with adverb

Sentence: I like foot ball as my hobby, why I like football, because football is popular in the world and football make me healthy.
Description: The fragment me healthy . is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace healthy with adverb
Description: The fragment football make me is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace make with verb, past tense

Sentence: My plan for next year is I want hard work for geting success.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to is and I

Sentence: But now i live in pare for study english and i ever worked in japan as sailor.
Error: japan Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: english Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: My father's years old is 70 and my mather is death.
Error: mather Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: My plan for next year is I want hard work for geting success.
Error: geting Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: I will join with australia company to next time .
Error: australia Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: That is why we must allways try it.
Error: allways Suggestion: always

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Words: 248 350

Minimum 250 words wanted

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 2.0 in 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 248 350
No. of Characters: 992 1500
No. of Different Words: 133 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.968 4.7
Average Word Length: 4 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.133 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 59 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 37 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 19 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 9 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 10.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.552 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.125 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.328 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.551 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.137 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5