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write about your family

My family lives in Viet Nam. I am the youngest member in this 5 people cozy group. I can not imagine how do I live without them.

First of all,my family consists of 5 people, me, my sister, and my parents. We live peacefully and happily for such a long time till now. Instead of living an easy life, my parents work pretty hard to keep us live sufficiently. Selling fruits, trading cargo to a variety places in my country are the main businesses of my parents. However, after working arduously all nights, see us sleep quietly and stably at home is the the best thing that they can not confess. That contributes to and motivates them a lot in working harder and harder.

Secondly,in term of their children. We all know our parents do not have spare time to concern too much about us. Apparently, studying ourself and try the best of us in academic work are the ways to satisfy and alleviate our parents pressure and hardships.My sister whom two years older than me is particularly good at learning languages. She is not only knows Korean, but she also proficient in English. Jealous and competitive are the feelings I have when I saw her results..Surprisingly, it encourages me a lot in studying to beat her one day in the future.

In conclusion, I and my beloved sister are in foreign country to obtain and increase not only the knowledge,but also the horizon in our desired faculties.Make them proud of us and gain back their money are both our goals and objectives in the near future

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see us sleep quietly and stably at home is the the best thing
seeing us sleep quietly and stably at home is the the best thing

My sister whom two years older than me is particularly good
My sister who is two years older than me is particularly good

She is not only knows Korean, but she also proficient in English
She knows not only Korean, but also English proficiently

I and my beloved sister
my beloved sisters and I

Make them proud of us and gain back their money are both our goals and objectives in the near future
Making them proud of us and gaining back their money are both our goals and objectives in the near future

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No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2

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Score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 273 350
No. of Characters: 1185 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.065 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.341 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.431 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 79 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 59 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 30 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.291 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.519 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.185 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5

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