On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the

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On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals.

I would like to contend that there are many flaws in the assertion stated by the author, which are, Is there any report or statistics shown that the number of accidents are increased by mopeds? It is stated that the accidents involves also include pedestrians, so it could be possible that the accidents are also caused by pedestrians or any group of unsound people? The native poeple of Balmer island who own mopeds' can aslo be responsible for the accidents? The reducing the rental companies for moped doesnt state that would decrease the rate of accidents just because the same thing has been performed by some other neighbouring island of Seaville. Does that neighbouring island has the same amount of population? or do they have same number of mopeds in their coast as per that of Balmer Island?

First of all, there is no proof that because increased population there are rise in accidents. The native people who owns the mopeds and the pedestrian of their own inhabitant of Balmer island could be the victim of the rash driving of their own people. So it could be possible that there is no indulgence of any foreign person for these accidents. It could be possible that the accidents involving the mopeds and pedestrians are because the island lack in some basic traffic rules due to which these accidents are occuring, and as the population increases in summer, it becomes conjusted, as a reason accidents would be increasing.

Secondly, On what grounds the town counsil of Balmer island asserted that reducing the number of rental per day would decrease the amount of accidents. The town counsil is presuming this because of the neigbouring island has implemented this strategy and they got what they wanted. But is it stated that both the islands has the same population? With the same number of mopeds? All other factors like proper traffic guidance and all? It has not proven that the factors that affected or the reason that made the neighbouring island of Seaville, reducing the rental for the same reason.

Thirdly, By imposing the reduced rentals of mopeds by that the neighbouring island imposed then is there any guarantee that the number of accidents would be substansially be reduced? The town counsil states that the accidents would be reduced by 50% as this is achieved by other island. We cannot assert others idea of enforcement into ours without comparing exclusively the conditons of both the sides. We dont know how many accidents happened in that neighbouring island? nor we know that the number of mopeds rented or the total number of moped accountatively of both rentals and the native people.

Therefore, it doesn't signify proper data or comaprison to the other island, so that we have so credibility that imposing this law would benefit our current situation. We should have proper knowledge of the incidents happening and also the extent to which it should be mitigated. Not like assuming the results that are achieved by the neighbouring island, that the accidents would be reduced by 50% if we reduce the rental of moped by half. There is no link between the two islands that the state counsil is willing to enforce without sufficient details.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'third', 'thirdly', 'first of all']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.241379310345 0.25644967241 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.16724137931 0.15541462614 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0706896551724 0.0836205057962 85% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0293103448276 0.0520304965353 56% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0396551724138 0.0272364105082 146% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.156896551724 0.125424944231 125% => OK
Participles: 0.0568965517241 0.0416121511921 137% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.61526195099 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.00862068965517 0.026700313972 32% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.131034482759 0.113004496875 116% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0275862068966 0.0255425247493 108% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0206896551724 0.0127820249294 162% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3188.0 2731.13054187 117% => OK
No of words: 539.0 446.07635468 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.9146567718 6.12365571057 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.57801047555 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.369202226345 0.378187486979 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.254174397032 0.287650121315 88% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.161410018553 0.208842608468 77% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.120593692022 0.135150697306 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61526195099 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 207.018472906 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.39332096475 0.469332199767 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.4679162752 52.1807786196 87% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.039408867 125% => OK
Sentence length: 21.56 23.2022227129 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7648938646 57.7814097925 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.52 141.986410481 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.56 23.2022227129 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.48 0.724660767414 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 46.9774397032 51.9672348444 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.92700729927 1.8405768891 105% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.556643772332 0.441005458295 126% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.1428066194 0.135418324435 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0926503307811 0.0829849096947 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.56055080653 0.58762219726 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.143150750977 0.147661913831 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.255048597318 0.193483328276 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120766232595 0.0970749176394 124% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.575967522659 0.42659136922 135% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0591776397926 0.0774707102158 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.437808160853 0.312017818177 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447722005434 0.0698173142475 64% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.87684729064 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.82512315271 124% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 10.0 5.36822660099 186% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 14.657635468 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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