The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist."Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rat

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The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
"Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures."

The assumptions of Dr. Karp, an anthropologist are written in his memo about the past survey was false and his team of graduated students can gain accurate understanding of child-rearing in the island with the interview approach. The author ignored important information and some question should be answered in order to decide the recommendation is likely to have predicted results.

The first question should be answered that whether all conditions in this island was stable during twenty years. It is quite possible that Dr. Field’s conclusion at that time, while changing condition during these years lead to Dr. Karp acquire different result. For example, residents in Tertia have more responsible for rearing each other children in twenty years ago, while some conflicts or changing generations making the different conditions. Without considering this possible scenario, the author cannot justifiably conclude that a survey, which Dr. Field did, is false.

Second, Dr. Karp provides no assurance that a survey on which the argument depends is statistically reliable. The author does not provide information of the number of children, who participated in the interview. Perhaps the number of respondents was too low to ensure that the result of survey is right. In addition, if the respondents are not representative of the overall population of children, who live in Tertia, the author cannot generalize the result of a survey to all children.

third, the author relies on the fact that speaking more about parents is an indication children was reared by parents. However, it is not necessarily the case. Parents may teach some important traditional to the children, which affect them significantly, while children spend much time with other resident in this island.

In the fourth place, base on the fact that interviews can results accurate information, the author infers that a team of graduated students will establish a much more accurate understanding of the matter. The interview may is best procedure in this matter, while a graduated students might have not enough experience to use this approach. In addition, students can not speak with the native language and they misinterpret of residents’ answers, which affect the survey negatively. Since, the author ignore this effective factors, his conclusion can not be acceptable.

In sum, the argument is flawed rationally and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen the argument the author must provide clear statistical information that Dr. Karp’s reflects all general population. In order to evaluate better conclusion, Dr.Krap must give more evidence to supports graduated students can do interview correctly. Moreover, we need to know about the condition of Tertia during twenty years ago.

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Average: 5.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...is likely to have predicted results. The first question should be answered that ...
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... result of a survey to all children. third, the author relies on the fact that spe...
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Suggestion: is the best
...anding of the matter. The interview may is best procedure in this matter, while a gradu...
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Suggestion: Krap
...order to evaluate better conclusion, Dr.Krap must give more evidence to supports gra...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'third', 'while', 'as to', 'for example', 'in addition']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.266260162602 0.25644967241 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.136178861789 0.15541462614 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0894308943089 0.0836205057962 107% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0528455284553 0.0520304965353 102% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0182926829268 0.0272364105082 67% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128048780488 0.125424944231 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0264227642276 0.0416121511921 63% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.00382343804 2.79052419416 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0223577235772 0.026700313972 84% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.119918699187 0.113004496875 106% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.030487804878 0.0255425247493 119% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0121951219512 0.0127820249294 95% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2807.0 2731.13054187 103% => OK
No of words: 432.0 446.07635468 97% => OK
Chars per words: 6.49768518519 6.12365571057 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.57801047555 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.44212962963 0.378187486979 117% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.319444444444 0.287650121315 111% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.263888888889 0.208842608468 126% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.178240740741 0.135150697306 132% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00382343804 2.79052419416 108% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 207.018472906 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50462962963 0.469332199767 108% => OK
Word variations: 56.8245599661 52.1807786196 109% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.039408867 105% => OK
Sentence length: 20.5714285714 23.2022227129 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8039851571 57.7814097925 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.666666667 141.986410481 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5714285714 23.2022227129 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.724660767414 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.58251231527 112% => OK
Readability: 52.5158730159 51.9672348444 101% => OK
Elegance: 2.02941176471 1.8405768891 110% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370905955348 0.441005458295 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.114339170778 0.135418324435 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.088387357899 0.0829849096947 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.56722043312 0.58762219726 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.132635459811 0.147661913831 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136921273146 0.193483328276 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650977653908 0.0970749176394 67% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.297451226696 0.42659136922 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0387536908355 0.0774707102158 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231462897176 0.312017818177 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434299001388 0.0698173142475 62% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.33743842365 120% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.82512315271 124% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 6.46551724138 155% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.82389162562 177% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 14.657635468 136% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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