The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette."On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involv

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."

The argument claims that Balmer Island should limit the number of rented mopeds in summer time in order to decrease the moped accidents since the number of people and moped accidents in the town increase in summer times. The editor’s account on the survey has many problems. The conclusion of the argument, this prohibition will decrease the number of accidents, depends on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence. Hence, the argument is unconvincing and has several undetermined flaws.

Firstly, the editor claims that the accidents occur only due to the mopeds while there is no such data which proves the same. It is possible that the accidents can occur due to other modes of transportation or due to bad weather in the island. As according to the editor the accidents occur only in summer while it can be more during monsoon and winter due to rain. The editor is describing unconvincing reason for the accidents.

Secondly, there is no data that describes the number of mopeds actually rented during the day. It is possible that the number is less than 25 also if the limit is still 50. So decreasing the limits might not be the solution to decrease the accidents. If the demand for the mopeds is more than 25 and the limit is decreased to 25 then the tourist would face inconvenience in travelling and would look for other travelling options which might also be harmful in the island.

The third reason is the editor has compared the data of Seaville Island with the Balmer Island which is unconvincing. There might be possible that the moped user in Seaville Island is more than in Balmer island. The data of accidents might be different in both the islands. The construction of roads might be different. The exact data of total moped taken on rent every day and total accidents occur should have been shown to compare both the islands.

In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above mentioned reasons and is therefore unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant statistics about accidents and number of moped users. In order to assess the merits of a certain decision, it is essential to have full knowledge of all contributing factors. Without this information, the argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debate.

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... and has several undetermined flaws. Firstly, the editor claims that the acci...
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...convincing reason for the accidents. Secondly, there is no data that describe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, third, while, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1929.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 390.0 441.139720559 88% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94615384615 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75173604876 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.425641025641 0.468620217663 91% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9786009577 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8571428571 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5714285714 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04761904762 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225565775636 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678213062369 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764760089452 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128295941754 0.128457276422 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681000416718 0.0628817314937 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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