The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette."On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involv

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.

"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

In the letter to the editor of Balmer Island Gazette it explains the correlation between the increases of the population during the summer months and the accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians. Hence, the writer claims that the council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island’s moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. On the surface, the connection between the mopeds accidents and the increase of pedestrians makes sense, however there are many unexplained fallacies that need to be examined carefully before making a decision that could bring an opposite result to the problem.

First, there should be moe information about the island’s population and moped accidents during winter verses summer days. Thence, the amount of mopeds rentals in the winter and in the summer. By getting all of this information covered, it could belie the assumption that the reason of moped and pedestrians accidents over the summer is related to the fact that there are too many mopeds rented. By comparing the different aspects and numbers, one might find out that there is a larger amount of moped accidents over the winter as well which will bring a different light on the problem. Finding the cause of the problem will make it easier on the council to come up with the right solution to solve it.

Second fallacy can be found when comparing the island of Seaville to the Balmer Island Gazette. It is mentioned that the town council of Seavile Island attained 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents last year however, there is no other information comparing the two islands in size, population, tourism, the condition of the roads and moped rentals. There is no information about the public transportation in each island and the amount of accidents during the winter verses summer time. This makes the reader think that by mentioning the success of Seaville Island to Balmer Island, it is like comparing apples to oranges. When comparing to another island, it should be done by looking at the different angles and aspects of both islands. Comparing the conditions of the roads each island has could bring to a conclusion that the council of Balmer Island might need to focus on fixing the roads rather than focusing on the moped rentals companies on the island.

Third, It is important to work wisely and make sure that by cutting down the amount of moped rentals the island is not going to hurt the businesses and the population who might be dependent on the mopeds to travel around. Also, it is important to check the targeted market of tourists who come to the island over the summer. If most tourism is based on young singles who count on the fact that they can rent the mopeds to move around, by blocking this option, it can hurt the businesses revenues and might create a decrease in the interest of those tourists who visit the island regularly. For example, many young Israeli children like to travel to different islands in Greece before going to the army. Those youngsters, plan on renting scooters in the island as it is fun, cheap and convenient. If the island decides to change some of those regulations about the scooters, many of those young Israeli travelers will choose to go somewhere else. If the majority of the tourism is built on those young people, the island will loose its tourism revenue for that season.

To conclude on this matter, it is important to do a lot of research before making a crucial decision such as hurting the revenue of the moped businesses and risking the tourism revenue on the island. First, there should be a study about the island itself to find out more information that might be affecting the accidents overall. Also, when discussing the moped issue on another island, it is important to examine and compare different areas in both islands to make sure that the comparison is not based on apples and oranges. Before changing anything, there should be a study about the targeted population coming to the island over the summer. Different population has different needs and in order to protect the tourism on the island, decisions about the mopeds and other options of public transportation should be considered carefully and not be copied automatically from another island.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 380, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...es from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. On the surface, the connection between...
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Line 5, column 485, Rule ID: SUMMER_TIME[2]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...t of accidents during the winter verses summer time. This makes the reader think that by me...
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Line 7, column 1028, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
... on those young people, the island will loose its tourism revenue for that season. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, look, second, so, then, third, well, for example, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => OK
Preposition: 125.0 55.5748502994 225% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3595.0 2260.96107784 159% => OK
No of words: 730.0 441.139720559 165% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92465753425 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.19793345208 4.56307096286 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54816945544 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 204.123752495 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.376712328767 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1110.6 705.55239521 157% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 2.0 0.471057884232 425% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.0516628714 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.269230769 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0769230769 23.324526521 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46153846154 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306673950014 0.218282227539 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10887322501 0.0743258471296 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814437962774 0.0701772020484 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202642308672 0.128457276422 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0792580932804 0.0628817314937 126% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.3799401198 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 98.500998004 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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