The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation
Although there is possibility that the shrinking of shoppers is due to the increasing skateboarders, the author does not offer sufficient evidence to prove it. Thus several questions must be dealt with so that his recommendation can achieve the expected outcome.
First, what the author asserts is that the popularity of skateboarding has increased while the business of Central Plaza declined. But in order to illustrate a convincing relevance between these two elements, the author also has to prove if skateboarders become less, the business will grow otherwise the argumentation will not be complete and logical to support the relevance between skateboarding and number of customers.
Second, to study the effect of skateboarding on the business of Central Plaza, we should exclude any other elements that could also have impact on the plaza’s customer. However, the author offers no background information about the business of the shop owners, making it obscure to determine whether things like the type of goods, the decoration of shops or the qualification of the shop assistants have changed over the past two years. If so, such changes could also be the cause for the losing of customers, and in the opposite, the same case. It is unfair and unreasonable to bluntly blame the business failure on the skateboarders without checking the shortcoming of their own.
Thirdly, the author mentions that more garbage has appeared in Central Plaza during the last two years, suggesting it is the skateboarders who are responsible for this phenomenon. Yet whether this suggestion is true or not needs to be further discussed. According to the passage, the author merely proposes an assumption without stating any proof to support it. This does nothing good to strengthen his argument. To complete this argumentation the author needs to give facts of skateboarders do make more rubbish in the plaza, and the more rubbish there are, the less customers there will be.
Finally, the author proposes to ban skateboarding in Central Plaza, and believes by doing this their business will return to the previous level. Nevertheless, he cannot neglect the possibility that his customers will not come back even if skateboarding is prohibited. After all, the damage caused by skateboarders according to his accusation may not be able to restore. And if so, his proposal will be a waste of time and public resource. Therefore, to rationalize his proposal the author must prove the effectiveness of it, that is, to prove the business will rise again once the skateboarders are cleared up.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 161, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... offer sufficient evidence to prove it. Thus several questions must be dealt with so...
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Line 4, column 563, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun customers is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...za, and the more rubbish there are, the less customers there will be. Finally, the ...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...once the skateboarders are cleared up.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, while, after all, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2173.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 417.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21103117506 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01640148061 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515587529976 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.471057884232 212% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.4243487331 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.722222222 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38888888889 5.70786347227 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18987679585 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063854068502 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0851813510954 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108624496301 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500192280725 0.0628817314937 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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