The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend.
"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
The author of this missive states that Adams Realty is superior when compared to Filtch Realty, and therefore counsels a friend to use the former when selling a house. Some arguments are provided in order to reach this conclusion, such as the fact that Adams Realty has more agents, its average revenue last year was higher and that those houses listed with this firm are sold faster; moreover, this last argument is bolstered further by the author as his or her own experience is provided. Although at first it might seem like a well-conducted argumentation, when subject to careful examination it is revealed that there are some undisclosed assumptions as well as several instances of poor reasoning. Consequently, the argument as it is provided fails to be persuasive and the validity of its conclusion is, thus, questioned.
First of all, the author carelessly assumes that the product with which botch firms are dealing is the same. It should be noted that those houses Filtch Realty firm is trying to sell could have completely different characteristics when compared to those Adams Realty deals with. Indeed, the product that Filtch Realty is selling could be less attractive to buyers than that of Adams Realty. Perhaps the houses Filtch Realty can sell are situated far away from the city center, this could lead to lower overall sales if the town is heavily centralized. Without proper information about what Filtch and Adams Realty houses are like, one cannot conclude anything; it is of capital relevance that this is correctly addressed in order to be able to obtain a correct conclusion.
Secondly, the author provides more evidence to support the claim by stating that Fitch firm has less agents, 25, than Adams, 40. Following this line of thought, the author also says that average revenue was higher for Adams than for Fitch. Although it might seem reasonable to guide ourselves following these facts, it should be considered that Adams’s revenue is just slightly higher than Fitch’s bearing in mind that the former has almost twice as many agents as the latter. Indeed, this could mean that Fitch’s agents are more efficient as its rate of revenue per agent is, actually, higher.
Lastly, the author gives his or her own example as a support of the claim. In spite of this former experience, it should be noted that the conditions of the home market might have changed in the time that has passed, ten years, since the first house was sold until the second one was. This should be also considered in order not to reach biased conclusions.
In conclusion, although if, when carelessly read, the argument might seem solid, it falls apart when properly evaluated. The fact that it is assumed that both firms deal with the same type of product, in addition to Fitch’s agents possibly being more effective in selling houses than those of Adams, as only absolute values are given, and that there is a complete disregard about the chronological conditions of the two different houses the author has sold, render the argumentation unpersuasive. If these flaws are addressed following the guidelines that have been stated above, the conclusion would be bolstered and become much more convincing.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 97, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun agents is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'consequently', 'first', 'if', 'lastly', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'as well as', 'first of all', 'in spite of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.220757825371 0.25644967241 86% => OK
Verbs: 0.174629324547 0.15541462614 112% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0856672158155 0.0836205057962 102% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0642504118616 0.0520304965353 123% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0296540362438 0.0272364105082 109% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128500823723 0.125424944231 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0609555189456 0.0416121511921 146% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.63647096036 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0247116968699 0.026700313972 93% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0988467874794 0.113004496875 87% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0247116968699 0.0255425247493 97% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0181219110379 0.0127820249294 142% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3238.0 2731.13054187 119% => OK
No of words: 535.0 446.07635468 120% => OK
Chars per words: 6.0523364486 6.12365571057 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80937282943 4.57801047555 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.364485981308 0.378187486979 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.244859813084 0.287650121315 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.164485981308 0.208842608468 79% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.115887850467 0.135150697306 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63647096036 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 207.018472906 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476635514019 0.469332199767 102% => OK
Word variations: 56.3441839447 52.1807786196 108% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.039408867 95% => OK
Sentence length: 28.1578947368 23.2022227129 121% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.6438023332 57.7814097925 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.421052632 141.986410481 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1578947368 23.2022227129 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.724660767414 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 52.6438760453 51.9672348444 101% => OK
Elegance: 1.52760736196 1.8405768891 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368552295637 0.441005458295 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.12976313838 0.135418324435 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.066413031513 0.0829849096947 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.578192879456 0.58762219726 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.126244355272 0.147661913831 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156834612332 0.193483328276 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696173275348 0.0970749176394 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.406402593632 0.42659136922 95% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0777811583552 0.0774707102158 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259199031425 0.312017818177 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290587866371 0.0698173142475 42% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.33743842365 120% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 6.46551724138 155% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 5.36822660099 112% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 14.657635468 130% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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