The following appeared in a memo from the Dean of the College of Education at Omni State University. "Only seven of our state's high schools offer even one course in Latin, but over 80 percent of the graduates who study Latin at those seven schools enroll in college. Furthermore, a recent study shows that students who have mastered Latin perform much better in logic and critical thinking. Thus, in order to increase the percentage of our high school students who graduate from college as well as to ensure that they receive a better education in critical thinking, Omni State University should begin an intensive program to prepare our future teachers to teach high school Latin. " Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument.
The author argument mention they want to hire a teacher who can teach Latin to the children. However, this conclusion was flawed. Because there is just one study on this subject, the relation between the number of job seekers for a demanding job was not considered, and the relation between studying Latin and critical thinking was not clear.
Firstly, There is one study one the relation between learning Latin and logic and critical thinking. It is a known fact being bilingual help student developing their thinking and broaden their horizon. So if the dean of the school say only children should learn Latin is not true. Every new language can help them develop their brain and become more familiar with logic.
Secondly, there is a study that relates the Latin to the critical thinking. There is no evidence about the place and the age group of the participant. It is reasonable to use and learn about these people and family background the place they raise. In most case, For example, if the children have family tutor they learn Latin more frequency, they will good at math. One the other hand, The children who spend much more time with a bad friend it does not have a good result.
Thirdly, In nowadays life the number of the people who study Latin is low. So they could find the job easier than other people. There is no grantee if the number of people surges, Finding the job is also Increase. It is sensible when the number increase dramatically, the job offer and the salary will decrease. So encourage children with different capability for learning the new language is not realistic.
In the conclusion, according to the author, school want to change the circulation according to a new job opportunity, one study that the relation between the study and the conclusion was not transparent. For changing the student timetable need lots of think and consideration.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...eir thinking and broaden their horizon. So if the dean of the school say only childre...
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Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: Nowadays
...oes not have a good result. Thirdly, In nowadays life the number of the people who study...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'increased'.
Suggestion: Increased
... people surges, Finding the job is also Increase. It is sensible when the number increas...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 55.5748502994 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1567.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 322.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86645962733 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51590557705 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478260869565 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9803409999 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.4736842105 119.503703932 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9473684211 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42105263158 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131233089528 0.218282227539 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427748736777 0.0743258471296 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470676777816 0.0701772020484 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0756647613876 0.128457276422 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0174516319361 0.0628817314937 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 14.3799401198 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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