The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College."To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current

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The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."

The assumptions of the director of student housing at Buckingham College about building a number of new dormitories sounds illogically convincing for several reasons. The director ignored important information and some questions needed to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted results.

First, relies on the fact that the average rent for apartment in the town has risen in recent years, the director infers that student will tend more to live in dormitory. The author must answer this question whether the increasing the costs of rents relate all zones in the city. It is possible in the downtown the expense of the rent an apartment has decreased. In addition, the director must determine that whether the cost of living in dormitory is less than renting an apartment in the city. Without considering these possible scenarios, the director cannot justifiably conclude that student tend more to live in compass because of increasing the rent in out of university.

Second, relies on the fact that Buckingham’s enrollment in increasing now, it will double over the next five years. The director provides no assurance that this prediction is reliable. In fact, perhaps the number students, who enroll in the college, are increasing, while it cannot be continue in the next years.

In the third place, the soundness of the conclusion that more student will enroll in the Buckingham College because of new dormitory should be answered by the author. It is quite possible this college can not attract more students because of offering fewer funds than other colleges. Moreover, the college can attract more students by implement others suggestion like hiring to teacher, bringing new majors, or even many sport facilities, while these may need less money.

In sum, the argument is flawed rationally and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen the argument, the director must provide statistical information about the cost of rent for an appartments and rate of increasing. In order to better evaluate the recommendation, we would know about all effective factors in attracting student to enroll in this college.

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Average: 6.2 (1 vote)
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'third', 'while', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'in the third place']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.246786632391 0.25644967241 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.159383033419 0.15541462614 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0745501285347 0.0836205057962 89% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0308483290488 0.0520304965353 59% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0154241645244 0.0272364105082 57% => OK
Prepositions: 0.167095115681 0.125424944231 133% => OK
Participles: 0.0539845758355 0.0416121511921 130% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.87592881981 2.79052419416 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0231362467866 0.026700313972 87% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.133676092545 0.113004496875 118% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0334190231362 0.0255425247493 131% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00771208226221 0.0127820249294 60% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2188.0 2731.13054187 80% => OK
No of words: 349.0 446.07635468 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.26934097421 6.12365571057 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.57801047555 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.41547277937 0.378187486979 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.32664756447 0.287650121315 114% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.234957020057 0.208842608468 113% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.151862464183 0.135150697306 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87592881981 2.79052419416 103% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 207.018472906 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515759312321 0.469332199767 110% => OK
Word variations: 54.6515705361 52.1807786196 105% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.039408867 80% => OK
Sentence length: 21.8125 23.2022227129 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0555127546 57.7814097925 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.75 141.986410481 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8125 23.2022227129 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.8125 0.724660767414 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.58251231527 0% => OK
Readability: 54.477256447 51.9672348444 105% => OK
Elegance: 2.275 1.8405768891 124% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.491479364068 0.441005458295 111% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.139219254507 0.135418324435 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0816250799481 0.0829849096947 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.649080128898 0.58762219726 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.110622352411 0.147661913831 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.223516816339 0.193483328276 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0973029042565 0.0970749176394 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.420923663213 0.42659136922 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0976784757487 0.0774707102158 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.344074647224 0.312017818177 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0642071708615 0.0698173142475 92% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.33743842365 60% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.82512315271 124% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.82389162562 177% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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