The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Buckingham College makes various reasons to build a new dormitory for the campus;however, the need for increasing the number of new dormitories requires more in depth analysis of the suggested and flawed arguments.
The memo argues that Buckingham College will double over the next 50 years based on the current trends; hence, the College should build the new dormitories to accommodate the future prospective students. Although Buckingham is preparing well-ahead for the future demands of housing for the College, the College should not simply jump into the conclusion that a new dormitory needs to be built. There are implications for building a new dormitory based on current trends because we cannot accurately predict the future of the College's enrollment. Today, the student body may be demanding for housing on campus, but over the next 50 years may be a different situation and scenario. The College needs to take into consideration the possibility of decreased enrollment and who will account for the empty dorm rooms then. What does Buckingham decide to do when there are vacant rooms in the dormitory? How will the College finance the new dormitory? All these are questions that the College will need to deeply inspect and probe before making the final decision.
In addition to the future projection of the student enrollment, Buckingham College is aware of the rising average rent in the college town that will make the student's difficult to live off-campus. However, to assume that the students cannot afford to pay off-campus is an overstatement. Some students who are financially stable and able to pay the increasing rent price may prefer off-campus over on-campus housing. The price of rent should not be the sole reason for building the new dormitory. Although the new dormitory is readily available for the student, the student may prefer to live off-campus who prefer to live a distant mile from the university campus. In addition, the students may have a family living together rather than a single person. As a result, the chance of living in an apartment will be greater than living in a college dormitory. The College should take into consideration different circumstances for the students whether or not building a number of new dormitories provide the answer to serving the housing needs of the students.
Moreover, the author assumes that the attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham. The prospectives students will consider various aspects of the College before deciding to enroll. The students will be paying for their academic and social lives on campus. Simply assuming that the dormitory is the only reason for the enrollment overlooks the other factors that impact the student's decision to attend Buckingham. The professors, the staff, location, and alumni network are part of the holistic package the prospective takes into consideration before enrolling. Hence, Buckingham needs to focus on beyond dormitory to make the assumption that the enrollment will be based on housing for the student.
To conclude, Buckingham College make various assumptions of building new dormitories. The increasing student enrollment may not last in the future. The current trend is only an indication of the now, but does not accurately fortell its future enrollment. The rising average rent in the town is another assumption when deciding to build the new dormitory for the student may have undesirable consequences for the College as students may prefer to live off-campus than on-campus. Lastly, the prospective student examines the whole College's atmosphere and learning environment before deciding to enroll at the College, not simply by the attractiveness of the new dormitory.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...ifferent circumstances for the students whether or not building a number of new dormitories pr...
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...curately fortell its future enrollment. The rising average rent in the town is anot...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'lastly', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'in addition', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.254237288136 0.25644967241 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.151001540832 0.15541462614 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.101694915254 0.0836205057962 122% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0369799691834 0.0520304965353 71% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00462249614792 0.0272364105082 17% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.120184899846 0.125424944231 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0385208012327 0.0416121511921 93% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.886797513 2.79052419416 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0354391371341 0.026700313972 133% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.144838212635 0.113004496875 128% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0369799691834 0.0255425247493 145% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0138674884438 0.0127820249294 108% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3765.0 2731.13054187 138% => OK
No of words: 597.0 446.07635468 134% => OK
Chars per words: 6.30653266332 6.12365571057 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94303383012 4.57801047555 108% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.43216080402 0.378187486979 114% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.328308207705 0.287650121315 114% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.226130653266 0.208842608468 108% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.162479061977 0.135150697306 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.886797513 2.79052419416 103% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 207.018472906 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.393634840871 0.469332199767 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.9454227453 52.1807786196 90% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 20.039408867 140% => OK
Sentence length: 21.3214285714 23.2022227129 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4787111508 57.7814097925 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.464285714 141.986410481 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3214285714 23.2022227129 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.464285714286 0.724660767414 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 54.1522493419 51.9672348444 104% => OK
Elegance: 2.144 1.8405768891 116% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.533344021428 0.441005458295 121% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.141211299837 0.135418324435 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0723541218925 0.0829849096947 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.604157121219 0.58762219726 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.158108856676 0.147661913831 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.247823220344 0.193483328276 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.094463264828 0.0970749176394 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.656800052178 0.42659136922 154% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0643473521793 0.0774707102158 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.440476431287 0.312017818177 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291362720444 0.0698173142475 42% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.33743842365 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.87684729064 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.82512315271 332% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 6.46551724138 46% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 5.36822660099 149% => OK
Neutral topic words: 13.0 2.82389162562 460% => Less neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 24.0 14.657635468 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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More arguments wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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