The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrolment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enrol at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Student housing Director of Buckingham College come up with analysis about the housing priorities which need to be done to accommodate the students properly. The notion of the director is valid and his/her point on increasing the dormitory space and making the dormitory attractive to make the students of Buckingham to enrol in the campus. But the memo stated that the dormitory seems to be costly and student cannot afford it. Also in the memo it has been mentioned that the director is looking only the prospective students who can enrol. This rises fews questions in the argument and also about the analysis which provides no ground for the increasing student count.
Firstly, the memo states that in 50 years there is a possibility for the student count to rise, which in turn results in accommodation issues. But the director's statement has no clear information about the students count or no evidence has been provided. Since the problem is not clear among the management, the college or the director has to involve them in finding out the problem, Is there any issues with the current dormitory, how students have enrolled, is there any feedback collected from the students about the dormitory and other sanity issues. Since the college requires to increase the enrolment by building new dormitory, they have to consider whether to existing dormitories are filled up.
Secondly, current enrolment of the students in the college and analysis about day scholar's count and students who is in need of hostels has to be done. Past year information about the college and whether the enrolment curve has gone up or down, since the college states increasing the dormitory is the only solution to accommodate this future issues, they have to also think about the consequences, even after increasing the dormitories whether a student will enrol in the housing system or not is a huge question.
Since the statement clearly states that the dormitory is not quiet affordable for the students, fees in the housing system, current students who have enrolled in the system, has to be analysed in terms of cost and other benefits which is being provided currently. If there are any existing issues which has to be solved, the management has to solve that, before getting into building any new dormitory.
In conclusion, director's thought about building new dormitory for the students is appreciable. If they properly analyse the current problems and also address the affordability issues of the students, then they are good with the existing plan. After the proper analysis, if there is no problem in the system, then the accommodation issues has to be settled in order to satisfy the future number of students.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'directors'' or 'director's'?
Suggestion: directors'; director's
...esults in accommodation issues. But the directors statement has no clear information abou...
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Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'increasing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: increasing
...nity issues. Since the college requires to increase the enrolment by building new dormitory...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'look', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'as to', 'in conclusion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.244855967078 0.25644967241 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.191358024691 0.15541462614 123% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0514403292181 0.0836205057962 62% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0432098765432 0.0520304965353 83% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0164609053498 0.0272364105082 60% => OK
Prepositions: 0.127572016461 0.125424944231 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0617283950617 0.0416121511921 148% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.67210277375 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.037037037037 0.026700313972 139% => OK
Particles: 0.0082304526749 0.001811407834 454% => OK
Determiners: 0.141975308642 0.113004496875 126% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00617283950617 0.0255425247493 24% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0185185185185 0.0127820249294 145% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2711.0 2731.13054187 99% => OK
No of words: 449.0 446.07635468 101% => OK
Chars per words: 6.03786191537 6.12365571057 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.57801047555 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.365256124722 0.378187486979 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.311804008909 0.287650121315 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.211581291759 0.208842608468 101% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.122494432071 0.135150697306 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67210277375 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 207.018472906 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412026726058 0.469332199767 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.0473719986 52.1807786196 86% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.039408867 80% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0625 23.2022227129 121% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.693198465 57.7814097925 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 169.4375 141.986410481 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0625 23.2022227129 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.75 0.724660767414 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 59.2429008909 51.9672348444 114% => OK
Elegance: 1.72950819672 1.8405768891 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.455802108371 0.441005458295 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.180401210756 0.135418324435 133% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0648348509621 0.0829849096947 78% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.670507327064 0.58762219726 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.128778613218 0.147661913831 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.235778537365 0.193483328276 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0921046644647 0.0970749176394 95% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.598186306452 0.42659136922 140% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.066770029927 0.0774707102158 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.346677004231 0.312017818177 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657967050181 0.0698173142475 94% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.33743842365 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.82512315271 104% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.82389162562 177% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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