The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College."To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrolment is growing and, based on current t

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The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrolment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The director of housing is recommending to increase the number of dormitories keeping in mind the future growth of the college. But the suggestion is likely to be accepted only with the presence of concrete evidence supporting the claim.
Initially, the college should have provided with certain reports or the documented records indicating the growth of enrollment. Without any figures relating to it, the statement sounds vague. If the authority would have provided with statistics like the ratio of students with dormitory and its change over the upcoming years, then it would have created a substantial base for their argument.
Moreover, the trend over the next 50 years cannot be completely relied upon. There is a high probability that the circumstances may drastically change in those years. It may be due to upcoming new institutions in and around the area, shifting of educational preferences of students around the region, etc. Such case should be preferably avoided in order to strengthen the case.
Along with it, the director has stated that the average rent in the area has increased without stating any solid reasons to support the claim. There is no history or any future endeavors to justify the case. The rent does not necessarily incline the students to opt for on campus accommodation. At the same time, the students may choose to stay away from the dormitories due to its stricter rules, inefficient administration, etc. As far as the affordability is concerned, the students have the opportunity to do any kind of internship or odd jobs which will help them sustain in rented apartments. Also, there is no mention of how affordable the on campus accommodation may prove as compared to off campus.
In the end, the board is feeling that the new dormitories will attract higher enrollment in college. This is a pure assumption without any credibility. Students look for more than infrastructure while choosing a university. Though the infrastructure may lure them, at the same time they are wise enough to know their preferences. The quality of education does matter at any point of time. With the emergence of newer universities, Buckingham College will require more than infrastructure on their side.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'had provided'?
Suggestion: had provided
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, while, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1867.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 363.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14325068871 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99546971802 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561983471074 0.468620217663 120% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.6426086555 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.9047619048 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2857142857 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.85714285714 5.70786347227 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117654823603 0.218282227539 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.031503171036 0.0743258471296 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357484629782 0.0701772020484 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0626966040206 0.128457276422 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281572589892 0.0628817314937 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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