The following appeared in a memo from the new vice president of Sartorian, a company that manufactures men's clothing.
"Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulties in obtaining reliable supplies of high quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. This coat should sell very well: since we have not offered an alpaca overcoat for five years and since our major competitor no longer makes an alpaca overcoat, there will be pent-up customer demand. Also, since the price of most types of clothing has increased in each of the past five years, customers should be willing to pay significantly higher prices for alpaca overcoats than they did five years ago, and our company profits will increase."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The vice president recommends that Sartorian should renew the production of the alpaca overcoat, as they recently find a new fabric supplier. Also, he predicts that the coat will be very popular due to the high demand, thereby increasing the company’s profits considerably. The claim seems to be eloquent at first glance, but it reveals some logical flaws, which are based on some precarious assumptions.
To begin with, the vice president suggests that the company should resume the manufacturing of the overcoat due to their newly signed fabric supplier. As mentioned in the argument, the firm once stopped producing the overcoat because of the insufficient supply of high quality wool fabric. As there’s no detailed information about the new fabric supplier, which is essential to evaluate its ability to supply sufficient high standard fabric, the recommendation made by the vice president is unwarranted.
In addition, the vice president cites there will be a huge demand for alpaca overcoat, because they haven’t offered the overcoat for years and their main opponent no longer produces such overcoats. However, it is entirely possible that the alpaca overcoat is outdated and consumers’ demand for it has dwindled in past five years, which urged the company to end up producing the overcoat. Therefore, the prediction made by the VP about the demand of the alpaca overcoat is highly questionable.
Finally, the vice president presumes that customers are willing to pay higher price for alpaca overcoats, as other types of clothes’ prices have experienced a significant increase in past five years. However, the vice president probably premises the design and materials of these clothes are all the same, but it is entirely possible that the higher price of other types of clothes is due to their sophisticated design and better crude materials. Without the good quality compared to other clothes, the sales revenue of the overcoat may be seriously affected, thereby undermining the increase of company profits.
In sum, the suggestion presented by the vice president is based on several unjustified assumptions. To bolster his suggestion, more detailed investigations, such as status of the new fabric supplier, the exact reason the company’s rival discontinued making the overcoat and comparisons between the overcoat and other clothes are required to make the recommendation more persuasive.
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'in addition', 'such as', 'all the same', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.258581235698 0.25644967241 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.141876430206 0.15541462614 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.109839816934 0.0836205057962 131% => OK
Adverbs: 0.045766590389 0.0520304965353 88% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0274599542334 0.0272364105082 101% => OK
Prepositions: 0.102974828375 0.125424944231 82% => OK
Participles: 0.0434782608696 0.0416121511921 104% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.04640726167 2.79052419416 109% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0274599542334 0.026700313972 103% => OK
Particles: 0.00228832951945 0.001811407834 126% => OK
Determiners: 0.116704805492 0.113004496875 103% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0114416475973 0.0255425247493 45% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00686498855835 0.0127820249294 54% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2438.0 2731.13054187 89% => OK
No of words: 377.0 446.07635468 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.46684350133 6.12365571057 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.57801047555 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.424403183024 0.378187486979 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.339522546419 0.287650121315 118% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.262599469496 0.208842608468 126% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.167108753316 0.135150697306 124% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04640726167 2.79052419416 109% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 207.018472906 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509283819629 0.469332199767 109% => OK
Word variations: 55.067813344 52.1807786196 106% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.039408867 70% => OK
Sentence length: 26.9285714286 23.2022227129 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5474032835 57.7814097925 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 174.142857143 141.986410481 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9285714286 23.2022227129 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.928571428571 0.724660767414 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.58251231527 0% => OK
Readability: 60.8808260705 51.9672348444 117% => OK
Elegance: 1.8829787234 1.8405768891 102% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344795734769 0.441005458295 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.150160683591 0.135418324435 111% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0723189494706 0.0829849096947 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.695868527928 0.58762219726 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0960390215938 0.147661913831 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185187538314 0.193483328276 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525147866913 0.0970749176394 54% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.496897876113 0.42659136922 116% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0248447227583 0.0774707102158 32% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258618255476 0.312017818177 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302882611465 0.0698173142475 43% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.33743842365 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 14.657635468 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.