The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a company that builds shopping malls around the country. "The surface of a section of Route 101, paved just two years ago by Good Intentions Roadways, is now badly cracked with a number of danger

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The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a company that builds shopping malls around the country. "The surface of a section of Route 101, paved just two years ago by Good Intentions Roadways, is now badly cracked with a number of dangerous potholes. In another part of the state, a section of Route 40, paved by Appian Roadways more than four years ago, is still in good condition. In a demonstration of their continuing commitment to quality, Appian Roadways recently purchased state-of-the-art paving machinery and hired a new quality-control manager. Therefore, I recommend hiring Appian Roadways to construct the access roads for all our new shopping malls. I predict that our Appian access roads will not have to be repaired for at least four years."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

Vice presidents of a company that builds shopping malls is showing the reason why the Appian Roadways are more efficient to construct the roadways around shopping mall. It is logically tenable at first glance, but when it goes in detail, it has some deflects and defects that assert the argument more plausible to apprehend.

The question should be answered is how many cars utilizing highways between Route 101 and Route 40. In other words, there should be comparison between car using highways. For example, 100 cars per day are using Route 40, but about 10,000 cars are using Route 101 Utilization of Route 101 highway is about 100 times of Route 40, which deflects the argument. Moreover, if this is true, then Good Intentions Roadways are probably more valuable than Appian Roadways. Thus, it should be recommended as utilization of Route 40 and Route 101 are the same, then Appian Roadways are valuable.

Also, question should be answered is how efficient does new state-of-the-art paving machinery. Recently, Appian Roadways just bought new machines. It is dubious that this new paving machinery would work the same way as the old paving machinery did. Because if it is new, workers should start to know how to access. Also, the length of the time that people are accustomed to use the new paving machinery would be another situation that would affect aspects of vice presidents. So if new state-of-the-art paving machinery is proficient as similar as old paving machinery, then it wouldn’t be a problem.

Lastly, the question should be answered is how dexterous and proficient of new hired quality manager. It is originally similar as second view. Basically, Appian Roadways is trying to continue better commitment of quality. However, new hired quality manager may not know how to use either old paving machinery or new paving machinery. So the recommendation of this is new hired quality manager would know how to use paving machinery and does the same process as proficient quality manager did.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 133, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean ''?
...ute 40. In other words, there should be comparison between car using highways. For example...
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Line 3, column 289, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'highway' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'highways'.
Suggestion: highways
...sing Route 101 Utilization of Route 101 highway is about 100 times of Route 40, which d...
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Line 5, column 361, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[4]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'accustomed to using'.
Suggestion: accustomed to using
... the length of the time that people are accustomed to use the new paving machinery would be anoth...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, may, moreover, second, so, then, thus, for example, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 55.5748502994 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1690.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 332.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09036144578 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73268310912 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46686746988 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.735218481 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8888888889 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4444444444 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133030033504 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0442271118691 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04917036632 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0859425771784 0.128457276422 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439874846739 0.0628817314937 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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