The following appeared as part of a letter to the editor of a scientific journal."A recent study of eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual's levels of stimulation. The study showed that in stimulating situ

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The following appeared as part of a letter to the editor of a scientific journal.

"A recent study of eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual's levels of stimulation. The study showed that in stimulating situations (such as an encounter with an unfamiliar monkey), firstborn infant monkeys produce up to twice as much of the hormone cortisol, which primes the body for increased activity levels, as do their younger siblings. Firstborn humans also produce relatively high levels of cortisol in stimulating situations (such as the return of a parent after an absence). The study also found that during pregnancy, first-time mother monkeys had higher levels of cortisol than did those who had had several offspring."

Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.

The explanation on the recent study, provided by the researcher to the editor of the sientific journal, sound compelling at the first glance but on the careful observation and rational analysis proves to be rife with unexpalined facts and holes.
The researcher claims to have caried out study on eighteen rehsus monkey and provides the explanation for the proposed theory, A very fundamental question that counters the proposed explanation is, "Are eighteen monkeys representative of the whole population?" The study is based on just eighteen monkey's with creates doubt on the explanation. For the study to claim to be sucessful eighteen monkey is not enough. It is possible that most of the monkeys exibit the charaterstic explained but the results cannot be generalised so that every rehsus monkey exibit the same characterstic.
The explanation is weak as it doesn't provide an exact % amount of monkey exhibiting the characterstic. In the explanation the reseacher compares his research finding with that of the case with human beings, though the analogy sound logical is inconsistent. Though humans and monkeys exibhit certain physiological similarities, it is obvious that analogy cannot always work. Monkeys and human face different challenges and social problems and applying analogy on rising level of cortisol between humans and monkey sound a bit irrational.
If teh explanation is able to provided proper reasoning backed with mathematical and statistical analysis

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: monkeys
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...sentative of the whole population?' The study is based on just eighteen monk...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.9520958084 15% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 28.8173652695 31% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 55.5748502994 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1263.0 2260.96107784 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 228.0 441.139720559 52% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53947368421 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 4.56307096286 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12138809401 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 204.123752495 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561403508772 0.468620217663 120% => OK
syllable_count: 396.0 705.55239521 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.6478473202 57.8364921388 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.333333333 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.70786347227 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198725228688 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0789332106175 0.0743258471296 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663892260582 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0990624010303 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0705205103998 0.0628817314937 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.3550499002 78% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.5979740519 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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