The following is part of a memorandum from the president of Humana University.
"Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space, most likely because instruction in the online programs takes place via the Internet. In contrast, over the past three years, enrollment at Humana University has failed to grow, and the cost of maintaining buildings has increased along with our budget deficit. To address these problems, Humana University will begin immediately to create and actively promote online degree programs like those at Omni. We predict that instituting these online degree programs will help Humana both increase its total enrollment and solve its budget problems."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
In this memo, the author considers the introduction of online programs as an effective way to resolve budgetary issues and attract more students. Although the argument may seem not groundless at the first glance, it turns out to be ill-conceived and untenable after its scrutiny.
To start with, the author refers to the fact that enrollment in Omni University has significantly increased after introduction of online program. Ostensibly, the arguer equals total enrollment at the university with the enrollment in online programs. In the case, when total enrollment in on decline, the number of students who has chosen online education may grow, but still it can make insignificant contribution to a total number of students at a university. Actually, for this reason, the author should answer the question about what was the enrollment statistics at Humana University last year before deciding to implement the same strategy or Omni University.
Furthermore, the claim that mere online programs will foster to decrease expenditures on class room spaces and dormitories is not compelling. For instance, if Humana University has invested a huge amount of money in order to reconstruct all dormitories and university buildings, then its amortisation costs may be dearth during several next years. In contrast, Omni University’s facility has come in dilapidation and require costly maintenance. Certainly, switching majority of students to online education will make dormitory spaces and class rooms less necessary, but it may give only temporary reprieve from this problem. Anyway, the whole university cannot abandon all its buildings, since some kinds of programs may require laboratory practice and in-class sessions, then Omni University may encounter the necessity to maintain its buildings again. Also, offering less on-campus degrees, the university may lose many students who were interested in this option. Thereby, the author should consider the fact that may be online programs development may have nothing in common with decreased maintenance fee for university building and it may have an opposite effect on enrollment of students.
Finally, the decision to imitate the strategy adopted by Humana university may give dissatisfactory results. On the one hand, having a competitor with solid reputation as Humana University, Omni University may lack popularity among prospective students. On the other hands, Humana University may specialise in more technical disciplines that require a lot of practise, and making degree programs taught online it may reflect on the quality of education, whereas Omni University is practicing education in social sciences and business where remote education does not affect the quality.
To summarise, the decision of the author to mimic the strategies implemented in Humana University may be unreasonable, because the author fails to consider several issues that are crucial for success of this change. The author should find out the true statistics for Omni University in order to make an inference about growing enrollment in that university. Also, switching to online education may not be effective strategy for resolving budgetary and enrollment issues due to difference in circumstances for Omni and Humana University
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, anyway, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, may, so, still, then, whereas, for instance, in contrast, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 16.3942115768 177% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2789.0 2260.96107784 123% => OK
No of words: 498.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.60040160643 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04861670359 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 204.123752495 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489959839357 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 914.4 705.55239521 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.471057884232 212% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2484102576 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.789473684 119.503703932 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2105263158 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.70786347227 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269189162607 0.218282227539 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0968994042425 0.0743258471296 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526610563555 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156078156757 0.128457276422 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0874656238153 0.0628817314937 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 14.3799401198 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 48.3550499002 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.5 12.5979740519 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 98.500998004 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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