The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books."We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because

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The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.

"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

The argument made by the board of directors of Monarch book to open a cafe in its store, as to attract more customers and compete with Regal book store who has recently opened cafe in its store. While the author as not given the proper evidence that, Regal book store as become more popular after opening cafe as compared to before without cafe.
Firstly, Monarch book ,have been in its business for the same location for more than twenty years, has large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. but it is also based on the location were it is located, where there are many Educated peoples surrounding the Book store. The author said that clearly, opening the cafe in the store would attract more customers by discontinuing the childrens book section, which will probably become less powerful from the national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. but the author has not given the exact decrease in percentage of children and it is also true that the people who arrive at Monarch with childerns to purchase books for their childrens and also for them, it will decreases when they remove the childrens book.
secondly, the author also not stated properly that Regals book store was down as compared to recently opening cafe.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...r as not given the proper evidence that, Regal book store as become more popular ...
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...re without cafe. Firstly, Monarch book ,have been in its business for the same l...
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...ide selection of books on all subjects. but it is also based on the location were i...
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...s. but it is also based on the location were it is located, where there are many Edu...
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...id that clearly, opening the cafe in the store would attract more customers by di...
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...entage of the population under age ten. but the author has not given the exact decr...
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...ue that the people who arrive at Monarch with childerns to purchase books for the...
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...ir childrens and also for them, it will decreases when they remove the childrens book. ...
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...s when they remove the childrens book. secondly, the author also not stated pro...
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...when they remove the childrens book. secondly, the author also not stated properly th...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'while', 'as to']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.265306122449 0.25644967241 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.155102040816 0.15541462614 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0571428571429 0.0836205057962 68% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0734693877551 0.0520304965353 141% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0489795918367 0.0272364105082 180% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.159183673469 0.125424944231 127% => OK
Participles: 0.065306122449 0.0416121511921 157% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.32875738479 2.79052419416 83% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0204081632653 0.026700313972 76% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0897959183673 0.113004496875 79% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0122448979592 0.0255425247493 48% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0204081632653 0.0127820249294 160% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1326.0 2731.13054187 49% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 228.0 446.07635468 51% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.81578947368 6.12365571057 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 4.57801047555 85% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.324561403509 0.378187486979 86% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.236842105263 0.287650121315 82% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.175438596491 0.208842608468 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0789473684211 0.135150697306 58% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32875738479 2.79052419416 83% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 207.018472906 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548245614035 0.469332199767 117% => OK
Word variations: 51.7124863627 52.1807786196 99% => OK
How many sentences: 7.0 20.039408867 35% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 32.5714285714 23.2022227129 140% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9581486692 57.7814097925 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 189.428571429 141.986410481 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.5714285714 23.2022227129 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.42857142857 0.724660767414 197% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.14285714286 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 3.58251231527 279% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 56.2556390977 51.9672348444 108% => OK
Elegance: 1.76470588235 1.8405768891 96% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.471016245234 0.441005458295 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.172336828789 0.135418324435 127% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.085570295949 0.0829849096947 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.728272061937 0.58762219726 124% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.151175098092 0.147661913831 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.247966484586 0.193483328276 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137085492054 0.0970749176394 141% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.30842455505 0.42659136922 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0787381040035 0.0774707102158 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28021141798 0.312017818177 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.166217866646 0.0698173142475 238% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.33743842365 36% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.87684729064 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 6.46551724138 46% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 5.36822660099 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 7.0 14.657635468 48% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 41.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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