An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The argument presented above concludes that the consumption of this new breed of millet will help with the Vitamin A deficiency among the people of Tagus. To ensure this, government of Tagus has come up with some plans such as subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. The argument however makes some assumptions which lack logical explanation. These logical flaws have been discussed in the succeeding paragraphs.
The main issue with above mentioned recommendation is the cost of the millet. The government or the International development organization might provide subsidies for farming the millet but in the end people of Tagus should also have the money to buy the end product. If they don't have enough money to do so, the whole plan to combat vitamin A deficiency falls apart. Not only subsidies, the development organisation with the help of Tagus government should also come up with a plan that will make this millet available at affordable prices.
Furthermore, the international development organisation which made this recommendation, should have made it with proper facts and figures. A scientific study showing the amount of vitamin A in a person before and after consuming the millet, would help the Tagus government take a more assertive decision. There is also no evidence provided in the statement that this new millet would be suitable to all the age groups. As it clear from the given information that people of Tagus don't have the luxury to buy food suitable to their age. A report on how this millet would affect child growth and nutrition content it provides, regardless of the age factor must have been submitted.
Thus, in light of the above it safe to say that if the mentioned concerns and questions are answered with detailed evidence, the government of Tagus can consider going forward with the plan. But they should implement this plan on a small scale and record the possible outcomes and if they are positive then they can implement it on a much larger scale.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 337 350
No. of Characters: 1637 1500
No. of Different Words: 170 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.285 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.858 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.712 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.051 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.342 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.342 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 277, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...e money to buy the end product. If they dont have enough money to do so, the whole p...
^^^^
Line 3, column 419, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ould be suitable to all the age groups. As it clear from the given information tha...
^^
Line 3, column 479, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... given information that people of Tagus dont have the luxury to buy food suitable to...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, then, thus, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.6327345309 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1669.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 335.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98208955224 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76406305162 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510447761194 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1500815949 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.266666667 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280183181444 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0985202958732 0.0743258471296 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0901040353501 0.0701772020484 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1724790073 0.128457276422 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0901237424394 0.0628817314937 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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