An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be p

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An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.

The statement given above is has many questions unanswered due to which statement becomes invalidated for proof.

Firstly, it is mentioned that people are deficient in Vitamin A of impoverished nation of Tagus, to which an International organisation has engineered a breed of millet. Millet being the staple food in Tagus for the people then how come deficiency happened. There is no mention of the reason of deficiency of Vitamin A in the argument. The deficiency should not be there if millet is a staple food in Tagus for people.

Secondly, even if we agree on the fact that millet is a staple food which is not having a high content of vitamin A in it, then why is it taken for granted that people will readily adopt the new breed of millet? Additionally, the new millet breed can differ a lot from old millet. New millet can have different taste, can differently react to bodies of people since it engineered and synthetically made.
People should not rely on the fact that if old millet is replaced with new millet then it will be the same quality millet which is of old. The new millet might effect many peole according to their immunity systems. Consequences can be anything.

Lastly, why the government of Tagus need to promote new variety of millet if there is a deficiency of Vitamin A. I believe that if there is a mass deficiency of Vitamin A in people of tagus then people must be aware about it, and people themselves wanting to do banish the deficiency. There will be no need to promote, if needed then there i no reason stated above why to promote when there is deficiency.

Henceforth, I do not validate this statement due to various unanswered reasons.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 160, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...t which is of old. The new millet might effect many peole according to their immunity ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1389.0 2260.96107784 61% => OK
No of words: 296.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69256756757 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71809594431 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 204.123752495 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.442567567568 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 450.9 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.471057884232 212% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.7177816124 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7333333333 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.06666666667 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.44475227037 0.218282227539 204% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16362535013 0.0743258471296 220% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103237013646 0.0701772020484 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200853033761 0.128457276422 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135335997479 0.0628817314937 215% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.5979740519 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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