An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be p

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An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

An international development organization has taken a wonderful step to combat vitamin A deficiency. They have introduce a new breed of millet, which is high in vitamin A. Since millet is a staple food in Tagus, people of Tagus will not have difficulties in adopting this new variety.
Although, this new breed of millet cost more than the original one, the government of Tagus should take appropriate steps to make popular this breed. Except this--Farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet, the government of Tagus need to make sure the cost of original millet and this mutated millet is same, otherwise the insolvent people of impoverished nation of Tagus will not buy this breed of millet and eventually it will impede the use of vitamin A rich millet.
Also, the government of Tagus should also organise campaigns, which will educate the people of Tagus to use this new breed and explain them the advantages of using this millet. They should educate people that deficiency in vitamin A can cause various diseases and by using this millet they can ameliorate those diseases.
If the government of Tagus will take all these steps in order to promote this new vitamin A rich breed of millet, they will be able to eradicate the vitamin A deficiency in the people of Tagus.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...iculties in adopting this new variety. Although, this new breed of millet cost ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.6327345309 25% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1080.0 2260.96107784 48% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 223.0 441.139720559 51% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84304932735 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 4.56307096286 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64783682199 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 204.123752495 51% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466367713004 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 351.9 705.55239521 50% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 19.7664670659 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.3291205989 57.8364921388 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.0 119.503703932 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.875 23.324526521 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.5 5.70786347227 26% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.529015109156 0.218282227539 242% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.263064432358 0.0743258471296 354% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0952764293646 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.361432604618 0.128457276422 281% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783087723078 0.0628817314937 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 98.500998004 45% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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