"Medical experts say that only one-quarter of Corpora's citizens meet the current standards for adequate physical fitness, even though twenty years ago, one-half of all of Corpora's citizens met the standards as then defined. But these experts are mistaken when they suggest that spending too much time using computers has caused a decline in fitness. Since overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest, it is clear that using computers has not made citizens less physically fit. Instead, as shown by this year's unusually low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, the recent decline in the economy is most likely the cause, and fitness levels will improve when the economy does."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
While the author concludes that decline in fitness levels od Corpora's citizens is due to declined economy of the state, the argument is filled with lots of unstated assumptions. The author of the statement states that Medical Survey found that there was significant decrease in the number of people who satisfies fitness level when compared to the state two years ago. However, many questions are left unanswered with respect to survey. Questions may include, how many citizens are taken into account while surveying? What is the majority age group of the surveyed people? Since there is a chance for increased number of old people when considered twenty years ago.
In addition, it is unstated that what tests are included in conducting the medical survey. How many attributes are included to conclude that person is fit and what are the criteria set by the medical experts to declare a person as fit are unknown. On the contrary, the argument states that the medical survey was mistaken while considering the factor of computer-usage in Corpora. But, this statement is based on the medical survey which doesn't have sufficient information to arrive at this conclusion. Moreover, it is mentioned that the conclusion is wrong since the number of computer owners were also high during the period when fitness level was also high. But on the either way, this statement is also obscure since the ratio of number of computer owners to the total population is still an unknown factor.
Also, the author suggests that decrease in economy would be the reason behind decreased fitness level. However, this statement poses a new argument whether the survey which is taken now and the one which was taken before twenty years has included the low-level and middle-level families. If yes, the proportion of the affluent versus middle class families are left unmentioned.
Although the author states the low expenditure on fitness-related products and services as a reason, there are some additional accountable reasons behind the decrease in fitness level such as climatic change, change in food cycle and the probability of people prone to diseases. Hence, the conclusion cannot be completely backed up on the reasons and assumptions author made since there are other valid reasons for the decrease in fitness-level of Corpora's people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
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Message: Did you mean 'sense'?
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...the reasons and assumptions author made since there are other valid reasons for the d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, while, in addition, such as, on the contrary, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1955.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 378.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17195767196 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66744471937 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502645502646 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.471057884232 637% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7189561651 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2352941176 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94117647059 5.70786347227 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.067421601183 0.218282227539 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0239569635473 0.0743258471296 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0284491437081 0.0701772020484 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0427444308448 0.128457276422 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.023763680369 0.0628817314937 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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