Most homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last heating season that region experienced 90 days with below-normal temperatures, and climate forecasters predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes are being built in the region in response to recent population growth. Because of these trends, we predict an increased demand for heating oil and recommend investment in Consolidated Industries, one of whose major business operations is the retail sale of home heating oil
The investment firm has advised the client about a seemingly fruitful opportunity.The firm has mentioned the current situation of homes in NorthEastern America wherein they use oil as a primary source of heat. Also scientific predicion about the future situation has been presented to support the claim. Also due to population growth, there has been increase in the housing development. All these reaons lead to final conclusion of investing in a company that is one of the giant in retail sale of home heating oil
The suggestion given by the firm is rife with loopholes which can be exploited.
Firstly the statistical data about the number of homes in NorthEastern America is missing. The firm says that "most homes" used oil as major fuel for heating. Now without any hardore statistics, it cannot be asserted that the number of homes was a large number. Also it has been mentioned that winters are typically cold. How cold? and typically cold in comparison to which region? To provide more support, they have also mentioned last season's climatic situation. They claim that last season experienced 90 days below normal temperatures. THey failed to mention to what level did they fall to and for how much time during those 90 days? was it consistent?
Secondly climate forecasters' prediction have also been used as evidence to bolster thier claim. But the firm failed to elaborate the weather pattern that the prediction claims to continue. The firm furthermore used the increase in population as a factor leading to increase in homes and evidently leading to increase in demand of oil. But here again statistical data is missing. The increase in population might not be that significant. Also it would not be feasible for a company to invest large capital in area with small growth potential.
Thirdly the firm claims that investing in Consolidated Industries would benefit the client. The firm has provided no evidence to the fact that the said company is doing business in the NorthEastern region of America. For all we know the compnay might be a market leader in all other places except this one. Also if the company is a major business, relativey small increase in demand might not interest the company. Hence they might be reluctant to invest in those areas where they feel the room for growth is very meager.
So to conclude the adivice given by the firm is full of loopholes. The Firm should have conducted more statistical data based study of the situation. Only then the potential benfits of the situation would become clear and hence they could offer sound advice to their clients.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2185.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 437.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67930652432 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503432494279 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.471057884232 212% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6033109349 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.9259259259 119.503703932 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1851851852 23.324526521 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.44444444444 5.70786347227 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250607102767 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637157903722 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737184566249 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108924375091 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108456789174 0.0628817314937 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.3799401198 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.