"The Mozart School of Music should obviously be the first choice of any music student aware of its reputation. First of all, the Mozart School stresses intensive practice and training, so that students typically begin their training at a very young age. Second, the school has ample facilities and up-to-date professional equipment, and its faculty includes some of the most distinguished music teachers in the world. Finally, many Mozart graduates have gone on to be the best known and most highly paid musicians in the nation."
Author claims that each and every music aware student should go to The Mozart School of Music because of its reputation and few other reasons including it stresses intensive practice and training, so that students typically begin their training at a very young age, also it has a large facilities and most distinguished teachers in the world,along with this the author says that many Mozart graduates have gone on to be the best known and most highly paid musicians in the nations. Althought these things are quite aluring but author claim has alot of latent assumptions which cannot be neglected.
Firstly the author doesn't consider the point that if the School has a high reputation than the admission process through which students are to be selected must be very tough and not every music enuthusatic student can clear through it.For example we know that the top university like MIT,CALTECH give admission to only those people with high GRE score and a very good academic background.Therefore not every student gets admission into these colleges, same is the case with The Mozart School of music. Hence we need to look for other schools of music and not just Mozart school.
Along with the tough admission criteria the annual fee of Mozart School of Music in a very passuiable case might be very high. The Mozart school stresses on intensive practice and training. The school even has ample of facilities and up-to-date professional equipment and to maintain such type of facilities they might be in a need of large amount of money and hence the fee structure of the school must be very high and not everyone can afford this much money. Along with this to maintain such renowed faculties they must be paying them high salary and again this must result into increase in the fee of the students admitted in the school. Clearly not everyone can be a part of The Mozart School of Music.
Lastly we must look into other schooling options available since there can be some public institues which provide simlar kind of facilties and can be way cheaper than The Mozart School of Music and clearly the needs of all people are not same, since there can be middle age people genuinely intrested in music but they cannot give there day and might like to join a night school. Also there are people who want to learn music as a hobby and not as future carrer prospective and might not like to join The Mozart School. It is quite clear that the needs of all people are not same and the author's conclsuion that every music student should go to The Mozart School of Music is not true and it misses out a lot of assumptions which should be beforehand cleared then only such claims should be made.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, lastly, look, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 11.1786427146 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2222.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 471.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71762208068 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41736505064 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430997876858 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 678.6 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 22.8473053892 171% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 151.587960347 57.8364921388 262% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 185.166666667 119.503703932 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.25 23.324526521 168% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 5.70786347227 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.437968423104 0.218282227539 201% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.199125088303 0.0743258471296 268% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108670396968 0.0701772020484 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288975546818 0.128457276422 225% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0407087433706 0.0628817314937 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 14.3799401198 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 48.3550499002 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.1 12.197005988 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 12.3882235529 222% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 17.6 11.1389221557 158% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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