In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town,we should encourage.Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area.The Hillview landfill which has been undevelopped for decades is a perfect site for this plant.the building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousand of Hillview residents left unemployed after computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year.i am asking the city council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer a significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing.-write an argument task.
The argument states that, Hillview city should encourage Autotech to build its manufacturing plant in the town and it would be beneficial for the city in a large way. The conclusion is based on the premises that, that Hillview landfill has been undeveloped for decades and a new manufacturing plant will allow residents of Hillview to get employment in the plant. However, in deeper analysis, it is evident that, certain relevant aspects has not been taken into consideration, leading to a number of mistaken assumptions and logical flaws.
One first flaw in the argument is that, the memo says that, Hillview landfill has been undeveloped for decades. What is the reason for that undevelopment of the landfill? Was it only for not permitting to develop the area before or the area is not suitable for development? Is there any case that, the area do have very difficult and undeveloped connecting roads or there was not enough utility facility in that city to develop it and to run that successfully? The Mayor should have cleared those issues to strengthen his viewpoint that just encouraging to develop the area will make the automobile company enough encouraged to start their manufacturing facility in that undeveloped area.
Similarly, the argument do have some vague statement like, the last year, Comutech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year, which left thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed. But does that really mean that, a automobile company will hire those software company's employees? A software engineer do have very little to do in a manufacturing industry, which is mostly based on mechanical engineer. So, the author of the argument should have clarified the issue regarding the amount of work that would be available for those software engineer by starting a manufacturing plant. So, that new plant will reduce unemployment problem in Hillview city is not fully substantiated. Moreover, Computech company aboandoned its national facility and thus not only the people of Hillview are suffering from that and thus, a new facility will attract people for work from all over the country, which will offset the benefit of establishing a facility in Hillview city and its people.
Moreover, the mayor urge the city council to authorize a campaign to attract the company and offer significant tax incentives for this giant car company. But the problem is that, the city is already in trouble of unemployment and thus in difficulty of cash flow. City council is also facing the same difficulty and thus a significant tax incentives to the car company can worsen the situation. So, the mayor should present some more information regarding the present market and economic condition of the city council to suggest that significant tax incentive proposal.
Lastly, to conclude, the argument lacks information and seems to provide irrational assumptions. The solution provided by the author seems tenuous due to lack of concrete evidence. The Mayor should have presented more concrete evidence like economic condition of the city council, infrastructure of the city to support big manufacturing plant to substantiate his viewpoints and to make the argument more cogent
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 152, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a large way" with adverb for "large"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...and it would be beneficial for the city in a large way. The conclusion is based on the premise...
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Line 2, column 202, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'developing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'permit' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: developing
...andfill? Was it only for not permitting to develop the area before or the area is not suit...
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Line 3, column 164, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...andoned its national facility last year, which left thousands of Hillview residen...
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Line 3, column 257, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ployed. But does that really mean that, a automobile company will hire those soft...
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Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this software' or 'those softwares'?
Suggestion: this software; those softwares
...an that, a automobile company will hire those software companys employees? A software engineer...
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Line 3, column 564, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this software' or 'those softwares'?
Suggestion: this software; those softwares
...unt of work that would be available for those software engineer by starting a manufacturing pl...
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Line 3, column 623, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...neer by starting a manufacturing plant. So, that new plant will reduce unemployment prob...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Two successive sentences begin with the same adverb. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ility in Hillview city and its people. Moreover, the mayor urge the city council to aut...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, may, moreover, really, regarding, similarly, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2716.0 2260.96107784 120% => OK
No of words: 517.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25338491296 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9205259535 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441005802708 0.468620217663 94% => OK
syllable_count: 865.8 705.55239521 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.471057884232 212% => OK
Article: 17.0 8.76447105788 194% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9442643847 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.333333333 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.619047619 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.70786347227 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252764885967 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840466014815 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0754137378768 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143438393587 0.128457276422 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0903175899134 0.0628817314937 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 98.500998004 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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