"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increasingly more time to covering national news and less time to covering weather and local news. During the same time period, most of the complaints we received from viewers were concerned with the station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, several local businesses that used to run advertisements during our late-night news program have just cancelled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to our news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should expand the coverage of weather and local news on all our news programs."
According the memo from the business manager of the television station, it is asserted that the television station should restore the time devoted to weather and local news. This assertion, made by the author are made on several assumptions and has many loopholes. Thus to strengthen his argument the author needs to address several assumptions.
Firstly, the author states that over the past year after they devoted increased time to the national news and less time to weather and local news, most of the complaints received from the viewers were concerned with their station's coverage of weather and local news. But never states the nature of the complaints, it might very well be the case that the viewers are not satisfied by the content of the news rather than the quantity of the news. As the case might be that the news channel is providing inaccurate data about the weather. Or the case can be that the reporters hired are not competent enough and the viewers are repulsed by that.
Secondly, the author assumes that the station is losing its advertising contracts due to change in their late night news program, but author never provides any evidence to support his assumption. As the case might be that the viewers of the show have decreased due to bad content of the news rather than the type of the news and hence due to decrease in viewership the advertising contracts are being pulled off. Or the case might be that any other news channel might be providing better deals to the advertising companies. Or the case also might be that the the local businesses might have thought to expand their viewer population to a global level and might have given their contracts to global news channels that broadcasts their advertisements to a larger population.
Finally, the author disregards the possibilty that the public is interested in a mixture of news including global news, national news, local news and weather reports and the news channel is unable to provide that. Thus to convince me and strengthen his argument the author must provide evidence to support his assumptions- Firstly, he needs to provide that is the quantity of news the major concern or the quality. Next he needs to address the fact that there might be several other problems that has led to loss in advertising revenues and address all those problems. Finally, a proper survey should be held to know the demands of the public.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 266, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ral assumptions and has many loopholes. Thus to strengthen his argument the author n...
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Line 3, column 446, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s rather than the quantity of the news. As the case might be that the news channel...
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Line 5, column 556, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...mpanies. Or the case also might be that the the local businesses might have thought to ...
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Line 5, column 556, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...mpanies. Or the case also might be that the the local businesses might have thought to ...
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Line 7, column 215, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...news channel is unable to provide that. Thus to convince me and strengthen his argum...
^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'well']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.248291571754 0.25644967241 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.168564920273 0.15541462614 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0797266514806 0.0836205057962 95% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0387243735763 0.0520304965353 74% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0364464692483 0.0272364105082 134% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0956719817768 0.125424944231 76% => OK
Participles: 0.0455580865604 0.0416121511921 109% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.51954841869 2.79052419416 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0478359908884 0.026700313972 179% => OK
Particles: 0.00227790432802 0.001811407834 126% => OK
Determiners: 0.143507972665 0.113004496875 127% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0296127562642 0.0255425247493 116% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00455580865604 0.0127820249294 36% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2414.0 2731.13054187 88% => OK
No of words: 412.0 446.07635468 92% => OK
Chars per words: 5.85922330097 6.12365571057 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.57801047555 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.330097087379 0.378187486979 87% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.259708737864 0.287650121315 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.169902912621 0.208842608468 81% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.101941747573 0.135150697306 75% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51954841869 2.79052419416 90% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 207.018472906 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.424757281553 0.469332199767 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.2833866467 52.1807786196 87% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.039408867 75% => OK
Sentence length: 27.4666666667 23.2022227129 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7865141704 57.7814097925 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.933333333 141.986410481 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4666666667 23.2022227129 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.8 0.724660767414 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.58251231527 140% => OK
Readability: 53.4375404531 51.9672348444 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.59813084112 1.8405768891 87% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.487361693938 0.441005458295 111% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.187586766739 0.135418324435 139% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.08955133315 0.0829849096947 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.676721017064 0.58762219726 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.110882730693 0.147661913831 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.247141092662 0.193483328276 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13719189275 0.0970749176394 141% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.620233507445 0.42659136922 145% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0425752485582 0.0774707102158 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.378905686629 0.312017818177 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0684007759751 0.0698173142475 98% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 14.657635468 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.