Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have

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Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

The author's argument begins with saying that Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear and right choice for any child, which assumes that all the children wants to learn dance, but in actual there must be many who wants to join some other classes such as music, art, etc. Are the fees affordable for everyone or not? This will decide whether the ballet school is the right choice for every child or not.

The author states that Pirouettes has the most intensive program among all the dance schools in Elmtown. But what is the program about? Is it suitable for every age group of children? What kind of dance forms do they teach in the program? The answers to these questions will decide whether the program is really intense and good for everyone as they will have a better idea of what will the school provide.

The teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Here the author assumes that all the teachers might have the experience to dance for big and well known companies. But in actual only few teachers might have got that opportunities and rest of the teachers might be inexperienced and young. To be precise how many teachers have danced for the prestigious companies should be known.

The author says that many but not all of the students have become professional dancers with top dance companies. Here the statement is vague and does not tell us the number of students who become professional dancers. Moreover, what was the strength of the school for that particular batch. So, what is the actual success ratio. What happened to the rest of the students who didn't make it big?

Therefore, whether the Pirouettes Ballet School is good or not for the students who have passion towards making career in dance can only be decided by knowing more about their fee structure, the intensive program and what are future opportunities after completing the program.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
The authors argument begins with saying that Piroue...
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Line 7, column 35, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...n. The author says that many but not all of the students have become professional dance...
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Line 7, column 376, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...appened to the rest of the students who didnt make it big? Therefore, whether the ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'moreover', 'really', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'kind of', 'such as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.228813559322 0.25644967241 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.161016949153 0.15541462614 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0932203389831 0.0836205057962 111% => OK
Adverbs: 0.045197740113 0.0520304965353 87% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0169491525424 0.0272364105082 62% => OK
Prepositions: 0.118644067797 0.125424944231 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0338983050847 0.0416121511921 81% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.37668621064 2.79052419416 85% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0169491525424 0.026700313972 63% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.127118644068 0.113004496875 112% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0282485875706 0.0255425247493 111% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0367231638418 0.0127820249294 287% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1906.0 2731.13054187 70% => OK
No of words: 328.0 446.07635468 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.81097560976 6.12365571057 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.57801047555 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.335365853659 0.378187486979 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.207317073171 0.287650121315 72% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.143292682927 0.208842608468 69% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0792682926829 0.135150697306 59% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37668621064 2.79052419416 85% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 207.018472906 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484756097561 0.469332199767 103% => OK
Word variations: 49.1848770989 52.1807786196 94% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.039408867 90% => OK
Sentence length: 18.2222222222 23.2022227129 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.110861881 57.7814097925 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.888888889 141.986410481 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2222222222 23.2022227129 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.444444444444 0.724660767414 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 38.9539295393 51.9672348444 75% => OK
Elegance: 1.70886075949 1.8405768891 93% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.67439539828 0.441005458295 153% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.153008234247 0.135418324435 113% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0945912786303 0.0829849096947 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.62127413655 0.58762219726 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.156972275313 0.147661913831 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.289796005918 0.193483328276 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135791025 0.0970749176394 140% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.379680522468 0.42659136922 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0230772712719 0.0774707102158 30% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.448498458841 0.312017818177 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0600771172597 0.0698173142475 86% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.87684729064 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.82512315271 187% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 5.36822660099 19% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 14.657635468 75% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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