Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument at first seem to be quite impressive and may attract a lot of attention. But after a close examination the reality may seem different.The author is self contradicting the argument by saying, on one hand that Pirouettes Ballet School is the best dance school and on another hand, there are more prestigious ballet and dance companies .Also, the extreme language used to argue seems little discursive. As a result, it is difficult to agree with the statement.
The most bromide remark is the assumption that author is declaring the institute to be the best among Elmtown. The self declaring nature of the author seems little arcane. One cannot judge whether the institute is the best unless proved otherwise. If some survey conducted by well known magazine was to declare that after examining different schools, Pirouettes Ballet School (PBS) was the best, then that would be more appealing. Without evidence it is difficult to believe the author. It may be his fawning nature to attract the students by giving such statement. Or it may be legit at the same time.But we just cannot assume anything before a proper study.
Also, author claims that the institute has the best teachers employed in the academy. Considering the teachers were working for the most prestigious companies all over the world, why did they chose to join the PBS in particular. This is little vague. A teacher who is employed in worlds best company naturally is inclined to work for it rather than quitting the job their and working in PBS. It might the case that teacher was not so good in her job that he/she was fired from it. Circumstantially he/she was forced to join the PBS. Again without conducting a proper study one cannot know. Had the author mentioned more specifics about why the teachers left former institution and joined PBS, it would have been more elucidating.
Moreover, same is the case with students who are graduated from PBS. The students studying in best school, as declared by author, should be more likely to join PBS after their graduation. But there is no evidence provided about the same.Also, the students who have left the school are claimed to be working for the best dance companies. But again the rock solid evidence is missing. It is very difficult to believe the statement which does not provide with enough evidence. Had the author mentioned the alumni who are working for famous dance companies it would have been easy to believe the author.
Concluding, it can be stated a proper study of the argument is necessary to evaluate the PBS ranking.It may be possible that all the claims by the author are cent percent true. Or there is also chance that it may be partially true. But until a thorough study is done about school ranking, school teachers and graduated students, we cannot take the authors side with certainty.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'as for', 'as to', 'in particular', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.216165413534 0.25644967241 84% => OK
Verbs: 0.204887218045 0.15541462614 132% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0921052631579 0.0836205057962 110% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0488721804511 0.0520304965353 94% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0357142857143 0.0272364105082 131% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0996240601504 0.125424944231 79% => OK
Participles: 0.0639097744361 0.0416121511921 154% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.56652088242 2.79052419416 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0281954887218 0.026700313972 106% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.112781954887 0.113004496875 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0300751879699 0.0255425247493 118% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.015037593985 0.0127820249294 118% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2846.0 2731.13054187 104% => OK
No of words: 485.0 446.07635468 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.86804123711 6.12365571057 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.57801047555 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.356701030928 0.378187486979 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.243298969072 0.287650121315 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.177319587629 0.208842608468 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.109278350515 0.135150697306 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56652088242 2.79052419416 92% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 207.018472906 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461855670103 0.469332199767 98% => OK
Word variations: 52.5376502627 52.1807786196 101% => OK
How many sentences: 27.0 20.039408867 135% => OK
Sentence length: 17.962962963 23.2022227129 77% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0859466735 57.7814097925 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.407407407 141.986410481 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.962962963 23.2022227129 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.481481481481 0.724660767414 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 42.2928598702 51.9672348444 81% => OK
Elegance: 1.31168831169 1.8405768891 71% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.469113796574 0.441005458295 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.111200044654 0.135418324435 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0832686723929 0.0829849096947 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.505928709634 0.58762219726 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.163827367938 0.147661913831 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.174581983153 0.193483328276 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108011978986 0.0970749176394 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.50003770812 0.42659136922 117% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0396472055548 0.0774707102158 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.332108816221 0.312017818177 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456595273581 0.0698173142475 65% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.33743842365 180% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.82512315271 124% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 6.46551724138 217% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 14.657635468 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 63.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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