Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In this argument the author concludes that Pirouettes Ballet School is a good place for any child to learn ballet. To support this conclusion, the author points out that the school has the most intensive program and teachers with professional performance experiences, and many of their students have been successful in their careers as professional dancers. Although this argument seems plausible, it is not convincing enough since several questions are not answered in this article.
First of all, the author fails to show that their program, teachers and other resources are really helpful for students' learning. Do students really like intensive program? Would it be too stressful for young children? Do the teachers with professional dancing skills also good at teaching? Are the facilities and other resource of the school decent enough? It is entirely possible that the intensive courses would cause students to lose interest in ballet, or those teachers only excellent at dancing and do not know how to convey their ideas and instruct students at all. If this is the case, the credibility of this argument will definitely be weakened.
In addition, the author does not show that those successful students would credit their success for learning ballet in this school. Do these students stay and learn ballet in the school for a long period of time? Do they attend other program or training that may be much more helpful? There is no evidence stated in the argument to answer these questions. In fact, it is possible that these students drop out from the school immediately after attending first several courses and picked a entirely different ways of training from Pirouettes Ballet School. If the author provide evidence that these students spent years learning in this school, learned a lot of useful skills and they really enjoy their time there, this argument will be much strongly strengthened.
In conclusion, despite it may ultimately be the case that Pirouettes Ballet School is a good school helped many students, we cannot conclude this from the argument as it stands now. To further bolster his or her argument, the author should provide more detailed and sound evidence about how may the school help students and what are their successful students' opinions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 198, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...d learn ballet in the school for a long period of time? Do they attend other program or traini...
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Line 5, column 487, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ending first several courses and picked a entirely different ways of training fro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, really, so, then, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 371.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16172506739 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58013861044 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471698113208 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.5992545217 57.8364921388 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.388888889 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6111111111 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94444444444 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27961302149 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0950503025455 0.0743258471296 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717044843987 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184813687923 0.128457276422 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361846096722 0.0628817314937 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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