A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal re

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A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.

Study asserts that efficacy of professional mental care is so low that despite children in suburban areas in United States seeing dentist 1.25 times per year, they have still more decayed teeth than children in Himalayan mountain region in Nepal. Before declaring professional cares are futile, they should reckon on potential reasons behind this result.

Firstly, possible explanation for this might the difference in their nutrition. For instance, there is a study shows that sugar intense nutritions damage teeth rapidly, hence, dentists admonish parent persistently. As we know, United States has a fast food intense eating habit, followingly, it is more likely to have more decayed teeth in these suburban regions with children consume hamburger, chocolates excessively. Additionally, this may be related to structure of water circulated in their regions and drinking this water weaken their teeth inadvertently due to acidity of this water.

Secondly, second important point worth to consider is genetic identity. According to researches, some teeth tend to decay more even people have a healthy nutrition. For instance, there is a study shows that even poor and sugar based nutrition, people in South Africa has healthier teeth compared to same eating habit.

Thirdly, another possible explation is the applicability of professional advices. There is an overlooked possibility that children in United States might not be follow instructions of professionals. For instance, many children may lie about their brushing teeth so that there might be result related to this fact.

Lastly, my recommandion is that they should conduct a study to elaborate eating habits, genetic structure and process of applying instructions.

In conclusion, after considering these, if results show that people who get professional care do not get advantage, then they should undoubtedly question professional cares.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, lastly, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1628.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 288.0 441.139720559 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.65277777778 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89875452182 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59375 0.468620217663 127% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2136118552 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.285714286 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5714285714 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.85714285714 5.70786347227 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199069660053 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0612032879467 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0964407300351 0.0701772020484 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0932333998247 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0920164779352 0.0628817314937 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.49 12.5979740519 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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