Recently Honey Bun replaced the use of sugar with aspartame, a sugar substitute, throughout its bakeries in the Northeast regions of the United States. Contrary to initial expectations, this change did not negatively impact our customer's preference. So far, only 5 percent of our customers have complained about this change, suggesting that an average of 95 customers out of 100 have no problems with the use of aspartame in our bakery products. It is therefore clear that since our customers have not expressed great concern about the use of aspartame instead of sugar, we should extend this change to all the branches of Honey Bun bakeries in the rest of the country.
Manager of the Honey Bun Bakery states that recent replacement of the sugar with aspartame throughout bakeries in Northeast regions of United States, responded positively. Only 5percent of the customers have complained about the use of the aspartame. And, therefore they should extend this change to all the branches of the Honey Bun Bakeries in the rest of the country. As the memorandum by the manager of the Honey Bun Bakery is obviously flawed, because the author did not considered the other factors affecting the explanation, which are explained in the following paragraphs.
First, the author said that the honey Bun bakery replaced sugar with the aspartame which is a sugar substitute, throughout its bakeries in the Northeast regions of the united States. And this did not negatively impact on the customer's preferences. So, first of all, the aspartame which is a sugar substitute. Therefore, the taste of it should be like sugar, obviously. So many customers of the Honey Bun bakery did not recognized the change in the taste. On the other hand, many people might have used the aspartame before some of them might have like the taste of the aspartame and some might did not like it and others who have not tried the aspartame might liked the taste or may be not. Who uses the aspartame might get used to it and did not feel any need to complain.
Second, the author states that only 5 percent people customers have complained about the change in sugar, which in end suggest the an average of 95 customers out of the have no problem with the use of the aspartame. As explained in the second paragraph the people who did not liked the taste of the aspartame get switched to another bakery which uses the sugar in their bakery products without giving any reviews about change. And the remaining people who did not like the taste of the aspartame complained the about the use of the aspartame instead of the sugar.
Third, the author further states that the change is not opposed by the large percent of the people (customers) of the bakery did not expressed great concern about the use of aspartame instead of sugar, Honey Bun bakery should use aspartame instead of the sugar. As everyone knows, the weather of Northeast region, which might be good for the aspartame and aspartame can not be used in the other part of the country as having different weather conditions, and also the preference of the people in the different location of the country might be different. Therefore, the recommendation of the manager is unacceptable.
In the end, as from the above alternate explanations shows the every perspective to not to use the recommendation by the manager to use the aspartame in every part of the country of United Nation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'third', 'first of all', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.269155206287 0.25644967241 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.127701375246 0.15541462614 82% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0432220039293 0.0836205057962 52% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0550098231827 0.0520304965353 106% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0137524557957 0.0272364105082 50% => OK
Prepositions: 0.157170923379 0.125424944231 125% => OK
Participles: 0.0373280943026 0.0416121511921 90% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.62700055039 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0137524557957 0.026700313972 52% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.176817288802 0.113004496875 156% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0235756385069 0.0255425247493 92% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0196463654224 0.0127820249294 154% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2746.0 2731.13054187 101% => OK
No of words: 471.0 446.07635468 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.83014861996 6.12365571057 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.57801047555 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.339702760085 0.378187486979 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.237791932059 0.287650121315 83% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.165605095541 0.208842608468 79% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.142250530786 0.135150697306 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62700055039 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 207.018472906 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.354564755839 0.469332199767 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 39.5330335787 52.1807786196 76% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.039408867 90% => OK
Sentence length: 26.1666666667 23.2022227129 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.0040533884 57.7814097925 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.555555556 141.986410481 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1666666667 23.2022227129 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.555555555556 0.724660767414 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.58251231527 167% => OK
Readability: 49.9458598726 51.9672348444 96% => OK
Elegance: 2.36 1.8405768891 128% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.593549136201 0.441005458295 135% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.222300945247 0.135418324435 164% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.138931523878 0.0829849096947 167% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.717153862853 0.58762219726 122% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.164021560675 0.147661913831 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.344166194595 0.193483328276 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104159038536 0.0970749176394 107% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.715620297259 0.42659136922 168% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0596412373181 0.0774707102158 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.477661364147 0.312017818177 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592381979 0.0698173142475 85% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 5.36822660099 112% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 14.657635468 75% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.