In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating, and fishing) among their favourite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes lit

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In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating, and fishing) among their favourite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is, therefore, sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The argument states a survey conducted regarding the recreational activities of the Mason City residents and assumes that swimming, boating and fishing are the most preferred recreational activities among the majority of the city dwellers. The argument also assumes the Mason River is hardly used for recreational pursuits and despite this fact, the city park department allocates a little of its budget to maintain the riverside for such activities. The city government however, has played no critical role in persuading the state government to take necessary steps to clean the river based on the fact that for years together, there have been constant complaints from residents about the quality of the river water and the stinky river. The argument's conclusion states that the city government should allocate more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities based on the assumption that the use of the river for water sports is bound to increase as the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. The conclusion of the argument is based on assumed cause and effect relationship and various other logical fallacies. Hence, there are many areas that require clarity before reaching to the stated conclusion.

Firstly, the stated surveys on which the entire base of the argument stands is quite weak. As the surveys doesn't mention various details regarding to the number of people who participated in the surveys, or whether the people who were involved in the surveys belonged to higher economic status who could pursue these recreational activities on their vacations far away from the city or not, or whether they preferred pursuing these recreational activities on regular basis or were they just keenly supporting the sport as a pastime instead of actually getting involved in the same. A few more details regarding the surveys would help to draw a far clearer picture about the required steps to be taken by the government.

Secondly, the conclusion is based on the fact that since the state has announced the plans to clean the river it is definitely going to be implemented in the near future. It is also assumed that immediate effects of cleaning the river would be seen, failing to recognize that cleaning a river that has poor quality of water and stinks take a longer span of duration to be completely cleaned. And on the basis of the fact that people will immediately switch back to swimming and boating and the fishes are going to flourish along the riverside adequate enough that people will be drawn to fishing. Hence, based on these false assumption and the fact that the river would be clean enough to be used within a span of year, the conclusion is stated that this particular year's budget should allocate more money for recreational sports.

Finally, the river water's poor quality and smell could probably be due to any reason such as sewage disposal in the river, the nearby chemical factory disposing toxic effluents in the river or garbage disposal in the river. Even after adequate steps are taken to clean the river, the citizens would be apprehensive about the cleanliness of the river, the optimum pH for swimming or would it cause skin infections that could even be deadly due to the toxicity of the river water. Therefore, the government of the state as well as the city first needs to allocate enough money to clean the river as it is the more major issue in hand. Ultimately, after enough successful efforts and having concrete evidence, not based on any assumption, reach a conclusion whether the city government needs to devote more money in its budget to riverside recreational facilities or not.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...tain the riverside for such activities. The city government however, has played no ...
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...f the river water and the stinky river. The arguments conclusion states that the ci...
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...e river water and the stinky river. The arguments conclusion states that the city governm...
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...overnment should allocate more money in this years budget to riverside recreational ...
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...nnounced plans to clean up Mason River. The conclusion of the argument is based on ...
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...ore reaching to the stated conclusion. Firstly, the stated surveys on which the...
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...nt stands is quite weak. As the surveys doesnt mention various details regarding to th...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'however', 'regarding', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'such as', 'as well as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.251155624037 0.25644967241 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.169491525424 0.15541462614 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0878274268105 0.0836205057962 105% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0570107858243 0.0520304965353 110% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0138674884438 0.0272364105082 51% => OK
Prepositions: 0.120184899846 0.125424944231 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0662557781202 0.0416121511921 159% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.61997104168 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.040061633282 0.026700313972 150% => OK
Particles: 0.00154083204931 0.001811407834 85% => OK
Determiners: 0.138674884438 0.113004496875 123% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0184899845917 0.0255425247493 72% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0107858243451 0.0127820249294 84% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3680.0 2731.13054187 135% => OK
No of words: 612.0 446.07635468 137% => OK
Chars per words: 6.01307189542 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97379470361 4.57801047555 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.349673202614 0.378187486979 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.258169934641 0.287650121315 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.192810457516 0.208842608468 92% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.122549019608 0.135150697306 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61997104168 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 207.018472906 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.410130718954 0.469332199767 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 49.3358618296 52.1807786196 95% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 36.0 23.2022227129 155% => OK
Sentence length SD: 91.816802708 57.7814097925 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 216.470588235 141.986410481 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.0 23.2022227129 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.882352941176 0.724660767414 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 61.8169934641 51.9672348444 119% => OK
Elegance: 1.82051282051 1.8405768891 99% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.448738691992 0.441005458295 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.201521241283 0.135418324435 149% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0839705071307 0.0829849096947 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.688101824041 0.58762219726 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.135229742176 0.147661913831 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.236227652863 0.193483328276 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104939871665 0.0970749176394 108% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.54332401778 0.42659136922 127% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0816380715979 0.0774707102158 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.342314720346 0.312017818177 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0908325731085 0.0698173142475 130% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.33743842365 120% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.82512315271 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 6.46551724138 139% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 16.0 14.657635468 109% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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