There is now evidence that the relaxed pace of life in small towns promotes better health and greater longevity than does the hectic pace of life in big cities. Businesses in the small town of Leeville report fewer days of sick leave taken by individual workers than do businesses in the nearby large city of Masonton. Furthermore, Leeville has only one physician for its one thousand residents, but in Masonton the proportion of physicians to residents is five times as high. Finally, the average age of Leeville residents is significantly higher than that of Masonton residents. These findings suggest that the relaxed pace of life in Leeville allows residents to live longer, healthier lives.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The author argues that relaxed pace of life in small towns lead to better health and greater longevity is an overstatement. The conclusion that the author draws present flaws in the argument that requires a closer in depth analysis for such such conclusion.
The author states that Leeville, a slower paced town compared to Masonton, shows a significant evidence of better health and live longer lives based on the notion that the city is slower paced. This argument overlooks the reasons behind why they have better health and longer lives. The residents in Leeville may have better health because of the environmental benefits of living in a less polluted town. Compared to a city such as Masonton that have bustling cars and buildings that exhaust various polluted and potentially dangerous elements that affect a person's health, Leeville has a more natural exposure that leads to better health. The stress that comes along with working in a city may cause the people in Masonton to deteriorate their health, which in turn may affect the longevity of their lives, but the simple notion that a relaxed pace of life leads to better health and greater longevity is an assumption that requires greater implications.
Furthermore, the author assumes that the fact that Leeville has only one physician for its one thousand residents does not evidently prove that the relaxed pace of life leads to better health and greater longevity. Leeville has only one physician because of sheer location of the town may be required for one physician that the local Leeville needs for emergency or urgent patient care. The residents may be capable to handle medical attention on their own that does not need more than one physician. Leeville residents may go to big cities for hospital care that requires large or extensive medical devices for serious health issues. As a result, the author does not explain what the patient needs for medical attention and assumes that just because there is one physician to care for the Leeville residents do not account for the notion that a relaxed pace of life leads to better health and greater longevity.
Moreover, the author argues that the average age in Leeville is higher than that of Masonton that accounts for the notion that the a relaxed pace town explains better health and greater longevity. However, higher age does not substantiate the notion that the town is capable for leading better health and greater longevity because the residents may be working in large cities such as in Masonton, and commute from home in Leeville. The author assumes that the residents in Leeville is bound by the small town when in fact the Leeville residents may be benefiting from services and livelihood of Masonton. In addition, residents in Leeville may be retiring in a relaxed pace town than in a large city because personal preference. Although the average age in Leeville may be higher, this argument alone does not explain the increased health and longer life in a relaxed pace town.
In conclusion, the author does claim that a relaxed and slower paced city leads to better health and great longevity, but makes assertions that overlook the reasons behind those arguments. The implications of making bold statements lead to generalizations that may hinder the true reasons and explanations as to why it is perceived that a relaxed pace of a town leads to the benefits that a small town has to offer.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...requires a closer in depth analysis for such such conclusion. The author states that ...
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... analysis for such such conclusion. The author states that Leeville, a slower p...
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...tially dangerous elements that affect a persons health, Leeville has a more natural exp...
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...onton that accounts for the notion that the a relaxed pace town explains better healt...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'as to', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'in fact', 'such as', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.275123558484 0.25644967241 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.140032948929 0.15541462614 90% => OK
Adjectives: 0.121911037891 0.0836205057962 146% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0296540362438 0.0520304965353 57% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00988467874794 0.0272364105082 36% => OK
Prepositions: 0.138385502471 0.125424944231 110% => OK
Participles: 0.0280065897858 0.0416121511921 67% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.57065888408 2.79052419416 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0263591433278 0.026700313972 99% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.112026359143 0.113004496875 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0181219110379 0.0255425247493 71% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0280065897858 0.0127820249294 219% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3438.0 2731.13054187 126% => OK
No of words: 574.0 446.07635468 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.98954703833 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89472135074 4.57801047555 107% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.393728222997 0.378187486979 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.278745644599 0.287650121315 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.18118466899 0.208842608468 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.104529616725 0.135150697306 77% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57065888408 2.79052419416 92% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 207.018472906 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.351916376307 0.469332199767 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 41.7374601533 52.1807786196 80% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.039408867 95% => OK
Sentence length: 30.2105263158 23.2022227129 130% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.8318416809 57.7814097925 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 180.947368421 141.986410481 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.2105263158 23.2022227129 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.736842105263 0.724660767414 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.58251231527 112% => OK
Readability: 58.0850907757 51.9672348444 112% => OK
Elegance: 2.45871559633 1.8405768891 134% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.534614185378 0.441005458295 121% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.234834797409 0.135418324435 173% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0980732830212 0.0829849096947 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.666517741371 0.58762219726 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.135206231287 0.147661913831 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.270584203292 0.193483328276 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12119749551 0.0970749176394 125% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.46701709753 0.42659136922 109% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0383804237713 0.0774707102158 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.404037596741 0.312017818177 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0754233313469 0.0698173142475 108% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.33743842365 192% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.87684729064 44% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.82512315271 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 16.0 6.46551724138 247% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 18.0 14.657635468 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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