"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation
Author proposes an idea to open cafe in Monarch book's store as it has large customers and space for cafe can also be easily created by removing children's book collection section.But the author doesn't provide cogent reasons to support his idea.The idea is based upon certain assumptions and ripen with certain loop holes.
Firstly the author assumes that book customers will also be customers of cafe as store has huge customers who will get attracted to cafe.But it may not be true because the store be good at it's collection of books which attracted the huge number of customers and made profit out of it but Monarch may not be good at preparing dishes and maintaining them as it is inexperienced it cafe field.Hence, even though it can attract customers in initial stages may not be profitable in long run.
Secondly the author assumes that location which is favourable for book store will also be applicable for cafe.It may not be true because in that particular location there might not be good book stores so many people purchased books from Monarch but it is possible that there already many good cafes in that location and hence people may go for other cafes.
Additionally, the author states that space for cafe can be provided by cutting down children books section as there is a report saying that there is decline in percentage of population under ten.But it based on false assumption that decline in percentage of population under ten is equivalent to decline in number of children under ten.It may be possible that there is increase in population of people both under ten and above ten but increase in population above ten greater than above below ten making percentage of people under ten less.This assumption may lead them to huge decline in number of customers for books making the store into loses.
Hence, by carefully examining various aspects, the idea may not be viable as it is based on some assumptions that location favourable for books is also favourable for cafe, success in books store will also ensure success in cafe and decline in percentage of population is equal to decline in number.Further it may lead to unnecessary waste of time and money if these assumptions are unwarranted.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 179, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...oving childrens book collection section.But the author doesnt provide cogent reason...
^^^
Line 1, column 194, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... book collection section.But the author doesnt provide cogent reasons to support his i...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 244, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...vide cogent reasons to support his idea.The idea is based upon certain assumptions ...
^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s and ripen with certain loop holes. Firstly the author assumes that book cus...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 157, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...ustomers who will get attracted to cafe.But it may not be true because the store be...
^^^
Line 3, column 381, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing dishes and maintaining them as it is inexperienced it cafe field.Hence, even ...
^^
Line 3, column 411, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Hence
...m as it is inexperienced it cafe field.Hence, even though it can attract customers i...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ges may not be profitable in long run. Secondly the author...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 132, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
... store will also be applicable for cafe.It may not be true because in that particu...
^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d hence people may go for other cafes. Additionally, the author states that spa...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 215, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...e in percentage of population under ten.But it based on false assumption that decli...
^^^
Line 6, column 356, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...decline in number of children under ten.It may be possible that there is increase ...
^^
Line 6, column 560, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...ing percentage of people under ten less.This assumption may lead them to huge declin...
^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...for books making the store into loses. Hence, by carefully examining various as...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 313, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Further
...opulation is equal to decline in number.Further it may lead to unnecessary waste of tim...
^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.276485788114 0.25644967241 108% => OK
Verbs: 0.162790697674 0.15541462614 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.103359173127 0.0836205057962 124% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0542635658915 0.0520304965353 104% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0361757105943 0.0272364105082 133% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.186046511628 0.125424944231 148% => OK
Participles: 0.0387596899225 0.0416121511921 93% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.63900002745 2.79052419416 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0180878552972 0.026700313972 68% => OK
Particles: 0.00258397932817 0.001811407834 143% => OK
Determiners: 0.0387596899225 0.113004496875 34% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0439276485788 0.0255425247493 172% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0103359173127 0.0127820249294 81% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2310.0 2731.13054187 85% => OK
No of words: 377.0 446.07635468 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.12732095491 6.12365571057 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.57801047555 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.334217506631 0.378187486979 88% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.249336870027 0.287650121315 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.167108753316 0.208842608468 80% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.122015915119 0.135150697306 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63900002745 2.79052419416 95% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 207.018472906 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.416445623342 0.469332199767 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 43.0710671691 52.1807786196 83% => OK
How many sentences: 5.0 20.039408867 25% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 75.4 23.2022227129 325% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 116.998119643 57.7814097925 202% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 462.0 141.986410481 325% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 75.4 23.2022227129 325% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.0 0.724660767414 276% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 3.58251231527 419% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 100.333687003 51.9672348444 193% => OK
Elegance: 1.97959183673 1.8405768891 108% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293328892919 0.441005458295 67% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.284787256618 0.135418324435 210% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0533237014694 0.0829849096947 64% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 1.0 0.58762219726 170% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 4.35682975705e-16 0.147661913831 0% => Sentences are similar to each other in a paragraph.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.195069935839 0.193483328276 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0292719440182 0.0970749176394 30% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.319500567874 0.42659136922 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0506021173181 0.0774707102158 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195069935839 0.312017818177 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292719440182 0.0698173142475 42% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.33743842365 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.87684729064 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.82512315271 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 5.36822660099 19% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 5.0 14.657635468 34% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
---------------------
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
---------------------
Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.