Workers in the small town of Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in the large city of Masonton, 50 miles away. Moreover, relative to population size, the diagnosis of stress-related illness is proportionally much lower in Leeville than in Masonton. According to the Leeville Chamber of Commerce, these facts can be attributed to the health benefits of the relatively relaxed pace of life in Leeville.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The author asserts that Relatively relaxed pace life can attribute health benefits because small town of Leeville shows Proportionally lower stress-related illness and fewer sick days of worker than large city of Masonton. However, the argument is unpersuasive because it relies on several questionable assumptions.
To begin with, the author assumes that proportionally lower stress-related illness of Leeville indicate great welfare, however, this may not be the case. For instance, small sample size can easily distort the proportional data. There must be exceptional case like increasing number of stress-related illness people and small sample group is susceptible to this fluctuation and as a result compare proportion with very different sample size is dangerous.Thus, additional evidence such as proportion of lower stress-related illness of Leeville for long term is required to decide whether this proportion indicate health benefits.
Moreover, it is assumed that Leeville’s fewer sick days of worker is indicator of good heath, however, this may not be warranted. For example, worker might have different field of working. If Leeville’s workers are mainly working at farm which are less dangerous and worker of Masonton are working at construction which are more likely to have unpredictable accidents, number of sick worker might not the indication of health benefit. Therefore, in order to judge if fewer sick worker indicates health benefits, further proof such as workers of Leeville and Masonton work in same field is necessary.
Finally, the argument rests on the assumption that relatively relaxed atmosphere of small town is the reason of their health benefits, however, it needs to be substantiated with further support. It could, for instance, it can might be because of characteristic of city like bad pollution large population which make different health benefits between Leeville and Masonton. In the city, there are lots of people with high density thus it is easy to be exposed to infection by other people, also there can be much air pollution with much traffics and large population. These factors might cause bad impact on citizen’s heath. Hence, more evidence should be provided to verify whether or not relaxed pace is healthful.
In conclusion, further evidence such as sufficient data for proportional stress-related illness to cover different sample size, where workers of these cities are engaged in to compare sick workers and relaxed pace is healthful is required for an adequate assessment or a more persuasive argument.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Thus
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Suggestion: many
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2186.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 396.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5202020202 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08179318577 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477272727273 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 91.7793489239 57.8364921388 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.733333333 119.503703932 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2 5.70786347227 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.401401184885 0.218282227539 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136770951629 0.0743258471296 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125930978817 0.0701772020484 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24149589755 0.128457276422 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102503088931 0.0628817314937 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 14.3799401198 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.5979740519 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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