All parents should be required to volunteer time to their children's schools.
The speaker claim that all parents should be requied to volunteer time their children's school. Though there exists lots of advantage in promoting education,better undersanding their children and deriving development of humanity,however,at the same time,defects of the claim should not be neglected concerning time,education skills and effects on children.
Admittly,parents paticipate in education will bring a blast of fresh air to the campus. Firstly,besides the acknowledge contained in textbooks,students can learn many other professional skills via parents from various fields which will consequently broaden their vision. Imaging a parent occupying on IT who surely relatively familiar with kinds of operation of computers, he can volunteer time to schools to teach certain practical softwares prevailing for students,such as VR,IMOIVE and so on.And,aiming at the serious problem that an increasingly number of students are addicting themselves in the fictitious world,the parent can tell the students how to take rationly the advantages of computers to color routine lives rather than being rolling in them. Second, volunteering time in their children's school will offer parents a well opportunity to get a better underatanding of their children in the school, a very place for parents to recognize other characters angles of their children . Because for every individual, whether a child or an adult,will show different behaviors or charaters within various places. Some parents may worry that their children are not able to touch with other students effective regarding their dominant silence when they at home.Perhaps,on the contray, their will be suprise to found that their children are talktive during the school. Last but not the least, while the parents volunteering at their children's school,they also set a good example for students,which prompting the development of students' humanity. When admiring a parent achievment ,a student may try to enhancing himself in order to catch up with the one he adored deriving by the instinctive behavior of imitation. Thus, it's well for parents to volunteer at their children's school.
On the other hand, some drawbacks inevitably exist in the thing . First,it may waste the parents' time:volunteering in school means less time for them to work or rest. At the same time ,as for children, having the intendance of both parents and teachers, they would be more passive to study,indeed, someday, without them, they don't how th arrange their study by themselves. In additon,unlike teachers, most of parents are never taking the professional course about teaching, thus they don't know how to absorb students attention on the content they teach that will cause to the low effective for both parents and the students.
In sum, i argue that we must be cautious when plan ithe claim into practice concering the both advantages and disadvantages
Sentence: Imaging a parent occupying on IT who surely relatively familiar with kinds of operation of computers, he can volunteer time to schools to teach certain practical softwares prevailing for students,such as VR,IMOIVE and so on.And,aiming at the serious problem that an increasingly number of students are addicting themselves in the fictitious world,the parent can tell the students how to take rationly the advantages of computers to color routine lives rather than being rolling in them.
Description: A qualifier, pre is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to increasingly and number
Sentence: Second, volunteering time in their children's school will offer parents a well opportunity to get a better underatanding of their children in the school, a very place for parents to recognize other characters angles of their children .
Description: The word well is not usually used as an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to well
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to characters and angles
Sentence: Some parents may worry that their children are not able to touch with other students effective regarding their dominant silence when they at home.Perhaps,on the contray, their will be suprise to found that their children are talktive during the school.
Description: The fragment not able to is not usually preceded by are
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace are with is
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a preposition
Suggestion: Refer to they and at
Description: A determiner, possessive is not usually followed by a modal auxillary
Suggestion: Refer to their and will
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to to and found
Sentence: Last but not the least, while the parents volunteering at their children's school,they also set a good example for students,which prompting the development of students' humanity.
Description: A WH-determiner is not usually followed by a verb, present participle or gerund
Suggestion: Refer to which and prompting
Sentence: In additon,unlike teachers, most of parents are never taking the professional course about teaching, thus they don't know how to absorb students attention on the content they teach that will cause to the low effective for both parents and the students.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to students and attention
Sentence: In sum, i argue that we must be cautious when plan ithe claim into practice concering the both advantages and disadvantages
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to plan and ithe
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by an End of sentence
Suggestion: Refer to disadvantages
Sentence: The speaker claim that all parents should be requied to volunteer time their children's school.
Error: requied Suggestion: required
Sentence: Though there exists lots of advantage in promoting education,better undersanding their children and deriving development of humanity,however,at the same time,defects of the claim should not be neglected concerning time,education skills and effects on children.
Error: undersanding Suggestion: understanding
Sentence: Admittly,parents paticipate in education will bring a blast of fresh air to the campus.
Error: paticipate Suggestion: participate
Sentence: Firstly,besides the acknowledge contained in textbooks,students can learn many other professional skills via parents from various fields which will consequently broaden their vision.
Error: fields Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Imaging a parent occupying on IT who surely relatively familiar with kinds of operation of computers, he can volunteer time to schools to teach certain practical softwares prevailing for students,such as VR,IMOIVE and so on.And,aiming at the serious problem that an increasingly number of students are addicting themselves in the fictitious world,the parent can tell the students how to take rationly the advantages of computers to color routine lives rather than being rolling in them.
Error: rationly Suggestion: ration
Sentence: Second, volunteering time in their children's school will offer parents a well opportunity to get a better underatanding of their children in the school, a very place for parents to recognize other characters angles of their children .
Error: underatanding Suggestion: understanding
Sentence: Because for every individual, whether a child or an adult,will show different behaviors or charaters within various places.
Error: charaters Suggestion: characters
Sentence: Some parents may worry that their children are not able to touch with other students effective regarding their dominant silence when they at home.Perhaps,on the contray, their will be suprise to found that their children are talktive during the school.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: contray Suggestion: contrary
Error: talktive Suggestion: talkative
Error: suprise Suggestion: surprise
Sentence: Last but not the least, while the parents volunteering at their children's school,they also set a good example for students,which prompting the development of students' humanity.
No spelling errors
Sentence: When admiring a parent achievment ,a student may try to enhancing himself in order to catch up with the one he adored deriving by the instinctive behavior of imitation.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: achievment Suggestion: achievement
Sentence: Thus, it's well for parents to volunteer at their children's school.
No spelling errors
Sentence: On the other hand, some drawbacks inevitably exist in the thing .
No spelling errors
Sentence: First,it may waste the parents' time:volunteering in school means less time for them to work or rest.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: At the same time ,as for children, having the intendance of both parents and teachers, they would be more passive to study,indeed, someday, without them, they don't how th arrange their study by themselves.
Error: th Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: intendance Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In additon,unlike teachers, most of parents are never taking the professional course about teaching, thus they don't know how to absorb students attention on the content they teach that will cause to the low effective for both parents and the students.
Error: additon Suggestion: addition
Sentence: In sum, i argue that we must be cautious when plan ithe claim into practice concering the both advantages and disadvantages
Error: concering Suggestion: concerning
Error: ithe Suggestion: No alternate word
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 14 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 17 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 470 350
No. of Characters: 2390 1500
No. of Different Words: 248 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.656 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.085 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.689 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 178 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 140 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.766 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.342 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.516 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5