All too often, companies hire outside consultants to suggest ways for the company to operate more efficiently. If companies were to spend more time listening to their own employees, such consultants would be unnecessary.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Although listening to the employees are very important for effective leadership, the aspects of the outside consultants are of equal importance, or even more essential. To run the business with best, most effective, and most efficient way, the bosses in companies should hire some outside consultants for suggestion, and for a proffesional point of view about how to solve the current problem. With the knowledge of all ideas and thoughts of the employees as well as the advices from the experts outside, the leaders or chairmen can do the best decision.
First, in order to make the right choice, simply listening to the emplyees is not enough. Even though the advices and complaints from people insides are precious, the point of view might have high possibility to be narrow, lack of the comprehensive range. The employees often think about their own wellfare such as cut of working time, raise of salary, and more rest time. However, most of them simply neglect the fact that the propser of the company is the only thing which can ensure the stability of their job, probably the most central way to gaining money. To establish the right, wise, and most correct policy, the leaders should also listen to the voice from outside, the disinterest and impartial judgment about the predicament of the business.
Moreover, with the different point of view, maybe much esoteric, the leaders may find the right direction into success of the company as well as all the employees. This outside help, usually well-trained, professional, and prossessing a wide range of background, could point out the most crucial part of the problem and provide a veriaty of possible cures from some other cases and their own insights. The very aid, compare to just listening to the employees and carrying out what they want, give the leaders another, possibly more effective, way to resolve the problems, struggling to get the company out of the mire.
Furthermore, since each points must have some defects, the wise entrepreneurs should take all the advices from the outside consultants and the compaints from the employees in to consideration, deliberate all kinds of the possible outcome and some accidents, and, finally, reform some existing regulations or set up new codes of business. It is the responsbility and most essential jobs of the businessmen to figure out what is most benefitail to the company as well as the employees. The burden lies on the back of the managers, which encourage them to contemplate all the circumstances and do the brainstorm, trying to benefit the poor employees and promote the business.
In the end, the sugestion from the hired outside consultants and the voices, sometimes cryout, from the employees are of equil iimportance. The great leaders should all thake them into consideration, balance the advices from the professionals and the reality of execution, benefiting not just the profit of the company, but also wellbeing of the hired people. Don't just listen to the consulors. And don't simply to do what the employees want, as well.
Sentence: Furthermore, since each points must have some defects, the wise entrepreneurs should take all the advices from the outside consultants and the compaints from the employees in to consideration, deliberate all kinds of the possible outcome and some accidents, and, finally, reform some existing regulations or set up new codes of business.
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Suggestion: Refer to each and points
Sentence: To run the business with best, most effective, and most efficient way, the bosses in companies should hire some outside consultants for suggestion, and for a proffesional point of view about how to solve the current problem.
Error: proffesional Suggestion: professional
Sentence: First, in order to make the right choice, simply listening to the emplyees is not enough.
Error: emplyees Suggestion: employees
Sentence: The employees often think about their own wellfare such as cut of working time, raise of salary, and more rest time.
Error: wellfare Suggestion: welfare
Sentence: However, most of them simply neglect the fact that the propser of the company is the only thing which can ensure the stability of their job, probably the most central way to gaining money.
Error: propser Suggestion: proper
Sentence: This outside help, usually well-trained, professional, and prossessing a wide range of background, could point out the most crucial part of the problem and provide a veriaty of possible cures from some other cases and their own insights.
Error: prossessing Suggestion: possessing
Error: veriaty Suggestion: variety
Sentence: Furthermore, since each points must have some defects, the wise entrepreneurs should take all the advices from the outside consultants and the compaints from the employees in to consideration, deliberate all kinds of the possible outcome and some accidents, and, finally, reform some existing regulations or set up new codes of business.
Error: compaints Suggestion: complaints
Sentence: It is the responsbility and most essential jobs of the businessmen to figure out what is most benefitail to the company as well as the employees.
Error: responsbility Suggestion: responsibility
Error: benefitail Suggestion: beneficial
Sentence: In the end, the sugestion from the hired outside consultants and the voices, sometimes cryout, from the employees are of equil iimportance.
Error: iimportance Suggestion: importance
Error: equil Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: cryout Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: sugestion Suggestion: suggestion
Sentence: The great leaders should all thake them into consideration, balance the advices from the professionals and the reality of execution, benefiting not just the profit of the company, but also wellbeing of the hired people.
Error: wellbeing Suggestion: welling
Error: thake Suggestion: take
Sentence: Don't just listen to the consulors.
Error: consulors Suggestion: consumers
flaws:
No. of Spelling Errors: 16 2
No. of Words: 507 350
Less words but more spelling check. write the essay in half an hour.
This writing pattern has problem. Make the body paragraphs shorter (specially shorten those sentences starting from 'however','on the contrary') or remove the fourth paragraph.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 16 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 507 350
No. of Characters: 2482 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.745 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.895 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.684 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 140 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.21 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.36 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.555 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.093 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5