Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that the person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot per

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Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that the person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit the inoculations to be routinely administered.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

Citing that there is a small probability of anti cow flu inoculations proving fatal to the persons being administered with it, the author argues that such inoculations must not be given. Though the author's argument may have merit, he fails to provide substancial evidence to support his argument. Therefore, the claim made by the author is unconvincing, as it stands.

Firstly, the author fails to provide details about the occurence and the spread of the disease. Does it spread only when people come in contact with cows affected with the disease or when people come in contact with the affected persons? The disease could spread due to contaminated water, food or simply through air. Such information would help in understanding the severity of the consequences of an outbreak of the disease in an area.

Additionally, the author sheds no light on how contagious the disease is. In all likelihood, cow flu might affect only those with low immunity like children or old persons. In such a case, it would be advisable to take precautionary steps to prevent these people from coming in contact with the agents that spread the disease since the inoculations may do more harm than good to these already weak persons.

Likewise, no mention of other possible steps that could be taken to control the spread of cow flu are made.
It all possibility, administering the cows in the area with similar inoculations or vaccinate them against the disease causing patogen might entirely eliminate the possiblity of an outbreak of cow flu, while at the same time not put the people at risk of loosing their lives due to the inoculation.

The author also mentions that there is a small possibility that the inoculation might prove harmful for the person administered with it. Statistical evidence of the percentage of people that lost their lives or were affected due to the inoculation in the past would aid in understanding the risk involved in administering the people. A mere one percent mortality rate among such people may indicate that it is worth taking the risk of administering the inoculation when faced with the threat of acquiring cow flu.

In conclusion, the lack of any conclusive evidence to espouse the author's view renders it facile. Information about the occurence of the disease, the effects of the inoculation, results of previous studies and statistical data relevant to the issue would aid the reader in a better evaluation of the author's argument.

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Sentence: Firstly, the author fails to provide details about the occurence and the spread of the disease.
Error: occurence Suggestion: occurrence

Sentence: It all possibility, administering the cows in the area with similar inoculations or vaccinate them against the disease causing patogen might entirely eliminate the possiblity of an outbreak of cow flu, while at the same time not put the people at risk of loosing their lives due to the inoculation.
Error: possiblity Suggestion: possibility

Sentence: Information about the occurence of the disease, the effects of the inoculation, results of previous studies and statistical data relevant to the issue would aid the reader in a better evaluation of the author's argument.
Error: occurence Suggestion: occurrence

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