Some people believe that increasing violence in media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, specially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented above.
Now-a-days, we are seeing increase in the violent acts in our society and that is reflected in the violent behavour from the children too. There are various reasons for this violent behaviour. Violence depicted through tv broadcasting, social networking media, the behaviour of the parents at home and children's peer groups are the major sources from where children learn violence and are deeply affected.
The violence depicted in our media has increased alarmingly in recent times. The one reason behind this is the easy accessibility of any criminal acts happening all around the world to the...
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Sentence: In the nutshell, we can say that its not only the media, parents and peer groups that cause increase in violence among children, there are other sources of violence too like one's neighbourhood, teachers at school.
Description: A determiner, possessive is not usually followed by a negator
Suggestion: Refer to its and not
Sentence: They can dissuade these children strongly from commiting small criminal offenses, for example, from stealing something from someone's school bag, fighting with each other with bad intentions.
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