In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement

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In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

The topic claims that in any fields, people will not be able to make a momentous contribution unless they have been greatly influenced by the past accomplishments. Nobody will deny the importance of the past work though some accomplishments result from accidental discovery, which however will be missed out without the knowledge within the field. So, I completely agree with the claim.

Momentous achievements result from the accretion of past work. Newton stressed the importance of precious work and explained his achievements: “if I have been able to see further, it was only because I stood on the shoulders of giants.” Imagine a new field in which nobody has ever involved yet. With this field, there are no prior knowledge or theories for scholars to build upon. They have to conduct many trials to test all kinds of theories. Hopefully, some mighty results would occur. Look at the process, all the accumulated advancements owing to the trials provide the essential foundation for successors to refer to. In other words, achievements, by nature, are the outcomes of accumulated work of the past. Without it, symbolic attainments are impossible.

Furthermore, past achievements promote the possibility of further great achievements within a field. In the field of physic science, Isaac Newton was greatly influenced by the Italian natural philosopher, Galileo, and the German astronomer, Kepler. He unified their theory of falling bodies and laws of planetary motion respectively and published his laws of motion and universe gravitation in The Mathematical Principles of Natural Philosophy in 1687. Moreover, not only did Newton discover Gravity, but also his work has paved the way for the possible development of the field. Building upon Newton’s work, Albert Einstein developed a whole new idea about Gravity—The General Theory of Relativity—which explains a number of phenomena that would otherwise violate Newton’s theory. As we can see, prior accomplishments can tremendously bolster the following contributions.

Admittedly, some significant contributions are results of accidental discovery. Yet, one is not able to discover anything crucial without being first equipped with the knowledge in the field. For example, in the field of Medical science, Penicillin was discovered accidently by Alexander Fleming in 1928. In august, he came back from vacation and noticed that in the glass culture dish that he had left out, some strange fungus had killed all the surrounding bacteria in the culture. From then on, medical history has never been the same. This significant discovery is accidental. Nonetheless, if Fleming had not been one in the field, he would not have realized the changes in the dish. Consequently, Penicillin would not be discovered by him. Thus, even for unplanned discoveries, they are by no means possible without past work.

In conclusion, the substantial impact the past achievements have on later-on significant contribution is indisputable. Though some achievements are accidental, they are impossible without being first impacted by the past work in the field. Hence, the claim is totally reasonable.

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Average: 6.2 (1 vote)
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'moreover', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'for example', 'in conclusion', 'in other words']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.244718309859 0.240241500013 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.137323943662 0.157235817809 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0985915492958 0.0880659088768 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0545774647887 0.0497285424764 110% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0334507042254 0.0444667217837 75% => OK
Prepositions: 0.133802816901 0.12292977631 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0369718309859 0.0406280797675 91% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.17699544298 2.79330140395 114% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0158450704225 0.030933414821 51% => OK
Particles: 0.00352112676056 0.0016655270985 211% => OK
Determiners: 0.0985915492958 0.0997080785238 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0158450704225 0.0249443105267 64% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00528169014085 0.0148568991511 36% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3177.0 2732.02544248 116% => OK
No of words: 489.0 452.878318584 108% => OK
Chars per words: 6.49693251534 6.0361032391 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.58838876751 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.406952965235 0.366273622748 111% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.323108384458 0.280924506359 115% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.241308793456 0.200843997647 120% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.177914110429 0.132149295362 135% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17699544298 2.79330140395 114% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 219.290929204 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537832310838 0.48968727796 110% => OK
Word variations: 64.8734886026 55.4138127331 117% => OK
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6194690265 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.8620689655 23.380412469 72% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2956597583 59.4972553346 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.551724138 141.124799967 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8620689655 23.380412469 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.586206896552 0.674092028746 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.21349557522 0% => OK
Readability: 49.1729074113 51.4728631049 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.84375 1.64882698954 112% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.447553468172 0.391690518653 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0774738373762 0.123202303941 63% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0658410062647 0.077325440228 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.447439989294 0.547984918172 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.190531608154 0.149214159877 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144786935553 0.161403998019 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079246314759 0.0892212321368 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.424633702655 0.385218514788 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0308416931536 0.0692045440612 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.311773668885 0.275328986314 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313847444127 0.0653680567796 48% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30420353982 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88274336283 266% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 7.22455752212 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.70907079646 258% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.5995575221 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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I used the 5 paragraph style. It still says "ideas may be duplicated." What else i can do to improve it?

Also, what does it mean by "Less neutral sentences wanted?" I argued on one side. What kind of sentences it is talking about? what should I do to reduce it?

Thank you!

1. look:

the argument 1:

Momentous achievements result from the accretion of past work.

and argument 2:

past achievements promote the possibility of further great achievements within a field.

are very close.

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2. "Less neutral sentences wanted?" means you should not use a lot of examples, need more argument. over 60% of the content are examples.

flaws:
Too many examples.

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 30 15
No. of Words: 491 350
No. of Characters: 2578 1500
No. of Different Words: 250 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.707 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.251 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.976 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 187 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 151 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 107 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 81 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.367 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.244 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.533 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.256 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.42 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.077 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5