"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition." - Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or dis

Leaders are essential to any group. They govern how the group works and guide them in right direction. These individuals are even more essential in the world today as there virtually an infinite number of industries and organizations which need proper guidance. Therefore, training proper leaders are paramount for a better future.

The statement claims that leaders should be instilled with a sense of cooperation instead of competition. While it is true that cooperation is more important than coordination, we should not discard competition altogether. Instead, both competition and coordination must be instilled in young individuals to make them more effective leaders.

For a group of people to form a cohesive and effective unit, a sense of cooperation is required. Without cooperation, people will work towards different goals and the effectiveness of the group is bad. If this group is instilled with competition, the situation will only get exacerbated. Therefore, a leader who can effectively instill a sense of cooperation is required; only this type of leader can bring together a group and increase overall effectiveness. For example, in the army, each unit of soldiers is assigned a leader who instills a sense of cooperation and order in each group; those who do not cooperate are penalized as non-cooperation may lead to death. A sense of competition is not instilled in soldiers as it serves no purpose.

Although a good leader enforces cooperation in a group, a great leader not only unites the group but also stay head-strong in difficult situations. For this, a leader must have experienced situation of failure and close to failure. This can be instilled the competition. It is undeniable that competition helps a person grow. People gain confidence through their victories and learn from their failure. Therefore by complementing cooperation and coordination, a person becomes an effective leader.

Although competition might be bad within groups, they are essential for leader to grow and be more effective.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s, they are essential for leader to grow and be more effective.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, still, therefore, while, for example, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 58.6224719101 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 321.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36760124611 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18856445059 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523364485981 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.0203149686 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.15 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.05 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115976873684 0.243740707755 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0425686509274 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0314273197208 0.0758088955206 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0659416215189 0.150359130593 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0229981805203 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 100.480337079 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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