the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government,industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation,not competition.

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the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government,industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation,not competition.

What the world is today, is not because of the competition, but only "COOPERATION". That is what the issue is all about, what to focus more and what to avoid. The focus of the issue is the most complex and controversial topic, is what the child goes through since his/her birth. What I want to state by my side that the power of cooperation is far far more than the power of competition.

As the child grows up gradually and starts going nursery, the bell of competition starts ringing into his/her ears. Due to that fear of competition the child starts back stepping from the day one and why not? Just because of the fact that the parents of the child wants him/her to be more successful and happiest among all does not mean that he/she should be given this much pressure from the start of his life. What is worse is that the parents want to see grow up a perfect child, but back in there mind they try to just ignore the thought that no one here is perfect. One would say he or she can be up to some extent but not by the point of throwing them in to the pool of competition, rather they should be treated as they are special.

Moreover as the age increases the issue becomes more and more exaggereted. The exams, the results, everything in the child life is surrounded by the one and only word "Competition". What happens in that sheer pressure is not the fantastic perfomance but just a forceful result. Day by day the child gets judged based on his/her perfomances in certain fields or time, they are not even spared in the sports too. Sports is one of the favourite hobby of any child living and making them compete through that is the worse thing any parent or teacher could be making them into.

The world has given us ample of examples of cooperation overcoming competition, why to become stubborn just by overlooking them in what so ever situation may be. What we should be doing is to rather giving them freedom to do how so ever, just adding a piece of encouragement to it and see how the result gets flourished. We have learned so many examples of cooperation since we started listening to our favourite and mesmarizing stories of history. "The ramayana", "The Mahabharat", "Stories of Akbar and Birbal", all of this examples shows us how to cooperate in our daily life and how to get the fantastic result through it. Even the great Chanakya has given us the lessons of cooperation while being in the competition. We could have a moral of the story from any of them.

Yes it is true that competition is sometimes a necessity to get out the best result through the favourites to be the best but not merely being reliable only on that but to have a cooperation among all the favourites too. Which might make you the best through the whole process or even anyone who truly deserves to be on that spot. There by I want to conclude that cooperation is better than competition at any of the given time in our precious life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 355, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: far
...y side that the power of cooperation is far far more than the power of competition. ...
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Line 3, column 215, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...ping from the day one and why not? Just because of the fact that the parents of the child wants him/her ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...ould be treated as they are special. Moreover as the age increases the issue becomes ...
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Line 7, column 552, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ories of Akbar and Birbal', all of this examples shows us how to cooperate in o...
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Line 9, column 403, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t cooperation is better than competition at any of the given time in our precious...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'while', 'it is true']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.199669966997 0.240241500013 83% => OK
Verbs: 0.160066006601 0.157235817809 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0577557755776 0.0880659088768 66% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0660066006601 0.0497285424764 133% => OK
Pronouns: 0.049504950495 0.0444667217837 111% => OK
Prepositions: 0.122112211221 0.12292977631 99% => OK
Participles: 0.042904290429 0.0406280797675 106% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.85390809122 2.79330140395 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0346534653465 0.030933414821 112% => OK
Particles: 0.00660066006601 0.0016655270985 396% => OK
Determiners: 0.118811881188 0.0997080785238 119% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0148514851485 0.0249443105267 60% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0280528052805 0.0148568991511 189% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2993.0 2732.02544248 110% => OK
No of words: 538.0 452.878318584 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56319702602 6.0361032391 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.58838876751 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.25092936803 0.366273622748 69% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.184014869888 0.280924506359 66% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.128252788104 0.200843997647 64% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.089219330855 0.132149295362 68% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85390809122 2.79330140395 102% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 219.290929204 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.436802973978 0.48968727796 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.8135639966 55.4138127331 92% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6194690265 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.3913043478 23.380412469 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3655931493 59.4972553346 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.130434783 141.124799967 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3913043478 23.380412469 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.347826086957 0.674092028746 52% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.21349557522 96% => OK
Readability: 41.7927913367 51.4728631049 81% => OK
Elegance: 1.32335329341 1.64882698954 80% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308328432621 0.391690518653 79% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.143010530136 0.123202303941 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0756095252206 0.077325440228 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.594970445655 0.547984918172 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.101862716222 0.149214159877 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143009339663 0.161403998019 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463876772145 0.0892212321368 52% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.45781827683 0.385218514788 119% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0830402239464 0.0692045440612 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232456326597 0.275328986314 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0170648008019 0.0653680567796 26% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.4325221239 105% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30420353982 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88274336283 123% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.5995575221 118% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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