Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.Write a response in which you discuss the e

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Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.

Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

Whilst I agree with the author that many of the cultural traditions are found in the major cities for many nations, I strongly disagree with the subsequent reasoning that cultural heritage should then drive financial support decisions. National budgets have rightfully been in the center of immense debate amongst politicians and the public because it is important to get this right; development plans are funded by taxpayers, for taxpayers. Hence, governments have the fiduciary duty to steward funds so that the country prosper economically.

The financial investment decisions of a nation depend largely on whether the investment is likely to bring returns. It is a contrived argument that the cultural heritage of a city would bring in a large proportion of the nation's income; it might be possible for a small country like Vatican City, but it is much harder for that to be true in a large country, say China. Beijing is the capital city of China, rich in heritage, home to the imperial palace and the world renowned great wall of China. Although Beijing draws in millions of domestic and international tourists eager to visit this heritage, it is Shanghai the financial and business hub of China, that brings in a larger proportion of its national income. It would hence be prudent to consider the possible returns on investment based on the additional income it brings before deciding on the beneficiary of investments.

Secondly, nonmajor cities should also be considered as candidates. Along the same lines of argument regarding returns on investment, investments in nonmajor cities could prove to be lucrative. Take Western Australia for example, the mining industry of Western Australia is a major contributor towards the Australian economy; it was a perspicacious move by the Australian government to ramp up infrastructure investments in Western Australia to facilitate the growth of the industry even though none of the major cities are found there. It is the investment potential that drives the economy, hence whether a city is considered major or not is a tangential discourse from the pith of the analysis.

Thirdly, departing from the argument of maximizing the return on investments, we should note that imbalance in investments across the country should be monitored and arrested before any crisis arises. If the government runs the country based solely on mercenary principles, cities that possess some innate advantage, such as geography, may continue to attract financial support; other cities are left undeveloped and over time, civil struggles would become inevitable. Public goods like welfare and infrastructure should not be deemed as secondary objectives when juxtaposed against the objective of a thriving economy.

In conclusion, although cultural heritage contributes towards the economy through tourism, it would be too myopic to direct financial support based on this sole reason. Financial investments should be based on a rational analysis like estimating the return on investment. That being said, governments should be concerned with more than just financial returns; prolonged neglect of any region could cause civil struggles that defeat the nation's original purposes for prosperity in the long term.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 222, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...ould bring in a large proportion of the nations income; it might be possible for a smal...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'regarding', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'third', 'thirdly', 'for example', 'in conclusion', 'such as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.261732851986 0.240241500013 109% => OK
Verbs: 0.148014440433 0.157235817809 94% => OK
Adjectives: 0.117328519856 0.0880659088768 133% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0324909747292 0.0497285424764 65% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0252707581227 0.0444667217837 57% => OK
Prepositions: 0.149819494585 0.12292977631 122% => OK
Participles: 0.043321299639 0.0406280797675 107% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.91850180408 2.79330140395 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0216606498195 0.030933414821 70% => OK
Particles: 0.00180505415162 0.0016655270985 108% => OK
Determiners: 0.108303249097 0.0997080785238 109% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0270758122744 0.0249443105267 109% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00902527075812 0.0148568991511 61% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3249.0 2732.02544248 119% => OK
No of words: 509.0 452.878318584 112% => OK
Chars per words: 6.38310412574 6.0361032391 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.58838876751 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.449901768173 0.366273622748 123% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.343811394892 0.280924506359 122% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.265225933202 0.200843997647 132% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.168958742633 0.132149295362 128% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91850180408 2.79330140395 104% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 219.290929204 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518664047151 0.48968727796 106% => OK
Word variations: 62.2317316639 55.4138127331 112% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6194690265 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.2777777778 23.380412469 121% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.0921670229 59.4972553346 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 180.5 141.124799967 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2777777778 23.380412469 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.833333333333 0.674092028746 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 62.658917267 51.4728631049 122% => OK
Elegance: 2.21052631579 1.64882698954 134% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370967014811 0.391690518653 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.122355128125 0.123202303941 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0669597481269 0.077325440228 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.589548532827 0.547984918172 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.126435913282 0.149214159877 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162253704764 0.161403998019 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0636360347245 0.0892212321368 71% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.42499286165 0.385218514788 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0572680724529 0.0692045440612 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267170658245 0.275328986314 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442490484122 0.0653680567796 68% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.4325221239 105% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 7.22455752212 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.5995575221 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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