College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
According to author saying one shold go in the field where the avalibilty of jobs is more after graduation, the claim of the author is totally fallacious as one can get a job even in other sector , for example every graduated student is eligible for appearing in IAS exam irrespective of the field in which he/she has pursued the degree.
Even though in the developing countries like india the main purpose of the every student is have to good job to earn their livelihood.So according to that one should select such a field where the availability of jobes is more,inspite of the interst of the student. But the interst and the keenness to knowledge are the things that affect the future of the student in specific field. If one has the intest in any field and has the ability to gain something he/she is surely goimg to be successfull one day. In countries like india where the fields like art people thought that there is no or very less money in this field because people want only to be monetary successfull but not mentally.
The author's claim is totally uncertain as if there are plenty of jobs in one field today that may not remain same in future, as there is the probability that in future goverenment plans might change, or may be with the change in country's financial conditions some fields may get strongly influenced. for example the availability of jobs in enigneering field was very high in india ,the copious of students get enrolled in that field but with time conditions changed and the availability of the jobs declined which had increased the unemployment rate in our country.
Thus the author claims doesn't fit well in the context of the availability of jobs but when it comes to complete the social and physical needs of one he/she has to select the field irrespective of their interst in which chances of getting the job are more willingly or unwillingly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 196, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s one can get a job even in other sector , for example every graduated student is ...
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Line 1, column 339, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...in which he/she has pursued the degree. Even though in the developing countries like india ...
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Line 2, column 93, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...he main purpose of the every student is have to good job to earn their livelihood.So...
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Line 2, column 135, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...ve to good job to earn their livelihood.So according to that one should select suc...
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Line 2, column 226, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , inspite
... where the availability of jobes is more,inspite of the interst of the student. But the ...
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Line 2, column 586, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...s like art people thought that there is no or very less money in this field becaus...
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Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ne field today that may not remain same in future, as there is the probability that in fu...
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Line 3, column 301, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...ome fields may get strongly influenced. for example the availability of jobs in en...
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Line 3, column 332, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...luenced. for example the availability of jobs in enigneering field was very high ...
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Line 3, column 382, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...enigneering field was very high in india ,the copious of students get enrolled in ...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...the unemployment rate in our country. Thus the author claims doesnt fit well in th...
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Line 4, column 24, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...n our country. Thus the author claims doesnt fit well in the context of the availabi...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, thus, well, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1551.0 2235.4752809 69% => OK
No of words: 330.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64486283619 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 215.323595506 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478787878788 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 704.065955056 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.2370786517 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 41.0 23.0359550562 178% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.1410032019 60.3974514979 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 193.875 118.986275619 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 41.25 23.4991977007 176% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348090526334 0.243740707755 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170988015178 0.0831039109588 206% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064113659482 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220700555443 0.150359130593 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481160112313 0.0667264976115 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.3 14.1392134831 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.32 48.8420337079 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 12.1743820225 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.87 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 11.8971910112 240% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 18.4 11.2143820225 164% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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