Director of student housing at Buckingham college states that to serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham college should build a number of new dormitories as it's enrollment is growing and based on the current enrollment data it can be predicted, we need more such. Author's such statement is quite opaque as if we see from general view. It does not mention the number of dormitories should be built. Even it does not measure the student enrollment percent that is accruing each year. So many flaws are there in the statement makes this claim quite confusing to people.
Every college and university has some in-house dormitories for their out of station students. There is also limitation to get those dormitories as they are less in number according to incoming student population. Lack of available space, lack of monetary support sometimes Universities tell their students to arrange their own arrangements for housing. But some times also they have some out-house student housings that are relatively few distant apart from the universities, that help the out station students to get their accomodation. So, whole data is needed to determine how many numbers of dormitories can be built in a student campus. Without that it is very unnerving situation to take such huge decision to build dormitories. So without a sound judgement and lack of internal factors, it is not very easy to say the dormitories needed in a campus.
Secondly, it is not mentioned the percentage of students increment in every year so we can deduce the viability of the proposition. In a past incident , Queensland University of Australia saw a surge of international student by 9.2%, an increment of 2.3% against the previous year. As a result, the university decided to make more out house housing for the incoming students in a affordable rate so that students can effectively find their staying place without any hassle. So, the whole thing was done based on a report on the student population that was incoming. This kind of research is totally absent here. So, it is not vindicated it's statement properly here. Therefore, it stumble here for any correct conclusion.
What is needed here, is a proper research on the upcoming student population against the previous year. After that, there should be proper research on the current University situation , which can withstand such increasing pressure-availability of land to built dormitories in the campus, availability of funds to make new dormitories in the campus. But all these things are missed out here so it is not a correct conclusion that can be made.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 157, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: less
...on to get those dormitories as they are less in number according to incoming student populatio...
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Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...y of the proposition. In a past incident , Queensland University of Australia saw ...
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Line 5, column 379, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...se housing for the incoming students in a affordable rate so that students can ef...
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Line 5, column 681, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'stumbles'?
Suggestion: stumbles
... statement properly here. Therefore, it stumble here for any correct conclusion. W...
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Line 8, column 25, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'proper research'.
Suggestion: proper research
...onclusion. What is needed here, is a proper research on the upcoming student population agai...
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Line 8, column 184, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...arch on the current University situation , which can withstand such increasing pre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, apart from, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2181.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 430.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07209302326 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94190924955 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483720930233 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.9300783321 60.3974514979 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1363636364 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5454545455 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63636363636 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242583098319 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640470271472 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111247979031 0.0758088955206 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158740972789 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129660097697 0.0667264976115 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.