Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and s

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Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

“Education is the most powerful weapon which you can use to change the world” ,these quotes wrote by Nelson Mandela. Our education system is good till thirteen year, after that graduated from the university and still do not do creative things and thus one does not confident about his work. In spite of this, one much focus on practical work, not on the theoratical stuff that is what had learnt from a institute. Formal education does not lead a student towards great success.

Firstly, we take an example of chemistry lab where students have not much time to do the experiments. They read many theoratical books to get the good marks or position from a class. But according to this theoratical stuff, they perform very few experiment. In addition, students have very less time to do the experiments. So they do not have another option, only focus on cramming the things. Formal education is valuable, only if students much focus on practical part rather than theory. If university authority should give the more time to spend on practical, then the students execute the experiments which was done by many great scientists. Likewise, a student can implement the experiment with his different perspective. In this way, he can free to do creative things beyond the books rather than do only cramming the books material. Obviously, a student show their talent and he become a scientist in future.

Secondly, as evidence if we look at the great scientist like Albert Einstein, Nicole Tesla, Issac Newton, these all are performed the experiment with free thinkings. They do not target on the formal education. Even though they became famous throughout the world, everyone know their practicals and still use it. From this, we also give the chance of free thinking to the students. Moreover they will show their talents and become creative from their institutions. So that they do not face much problems in their job life and also many of them famous as a reputated enterpreur.

In contrast, we can not totally ignore the formal education. Consequently it brings discipline and make daily routine in a task. Similarly students should need as formal education as well as free thinking. Hence they become more creative and talents and achieve future endeavors in life.

Recapitulating, we can say that students give freedom to think and do creative things, so that they solve any problem and grow rapidly, may become a great scientist in future. Thus formal education will help carry discipline and daily routine in life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, hence, if, likewise, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, similarly, so, still, then, thus, well, as for, in addition, in contrast, as well as, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.5258426966 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2120.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 421.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03562945368 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68758941411 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513064133017 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0912100627 60.3974514979 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.5384615385 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1923076923 23.4991977007 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61538461538 5.21951772744 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105333860077 0.243740707755 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0304207567237 0.0831039109588 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338332540156 0.0758088955206 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0601839073498 0.150359130593 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026358988726 0.0667264976115 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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