Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and s

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Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

The author assists that formal education has possibility to restrain our mind. Some might agree with author because many people feel someone who had been taken formal education shows no characteristics and he can’t have great achievement. However, this essay show why this may not always in the case.
Admittedly, formal education tends make people constrain their mind. If people learn same knowledge without considering their preference, people tend to construe some phenomena as same and there’s no diversity. Then there must be no creativity and development. Mankind developed solving difficult problem. There can be one solution to solve this problem but there must be better solution. It is possible if there’s people with different knowledge, thinking and characteristic. As Darwin theory, evolution of species is based on natural selection which imply most fitting species survive in nature. Therefore, formal education tends to decrease credibility and it can be weakness in development of humankind.
However, formal education is essential for young people who are lack of basic knowledge. It is essential part of living in modern society and it will be the base of further knowledge. For example, if someone wasn’t educated how to ride bus, or how to write essay, or even traffic rule, it might have difficulty living in modern society. In conclusion, former education is needed for people who didn’t have understanding living modern society.
Moreover, formal education is economical because it is already well-established and stabilized. Customized education is so expensive and inefficient. For example, for the students with different interests, more teacher needed for each student. and new teaching material is needed for these students.
In conclusion, while the author’s claim might seem beneficial in certain conditions, in light of above counter points like economical factor and essential basic knowledge, the author’s claim cannot be agreed in full.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 57, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...education is essential for young people who are lack of basic knowledge. It is essentia...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 33.0505617978 45% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 58.6224719101 51% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1709.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 303.0 442.535393258 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.6402640264 5.05705443957 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0560343283 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587458745875 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.4675162338 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.45 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.15 23.4991977007 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142897225681 0.243740707755 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0492377844925 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451007444533 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0779330812917 0.150359130593 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362613801116 0.0667264976115 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 39.33 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.84 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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