Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve.

Essay topics:

Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve.

Political leaders abiding by their own judgment could have more fruitful outcome for the development of their society. However, great government employees are able to listen to their people as well.

Clinging to their own decision, politicians can have an immense contribution to their society’s betterment. Generally, politicians are experts, and they have accumulated more experience in the field compared to people working in other fields. Political leaders are presumably capable of drafting national plans with far-sighted and overarching perspective, which is especially conducive to tackle on a problem with expedition. Former South Korean president Roh Moo-hyun serves as a compelling example. When there was an outbreak of SARS, a lethal epidemic assumed to have originated from China, president Roh insisted on quick and thorough containment of SARS. There was, however, severe opposition arguing that it is a waste of resources; people contended that government should set its attention on other matters, instead of focusing excessively on a disease. Despite oppositions, president Roh adhered to his plan and ensured there were no spread of disease and no casualties. His adamant tactic revealed to be a wise one that prevented huge detriments, which still inspires many countries in this present day and age with similar issues.

Nevertheless, the importance of an ability to listen to the public is not to be neglected by public servants. The role of government workers is to ameliorate their society that is comprised of people who trusted and voted them. Government officials ought to serve their people, their state, and their nation. Society’s demands change and politicians should listen to society’s new demands rather than abiding by their own knowledge. Recent passing of same sex marriage law in the U.S. cogently shows how a society can develop by their political leaders listening to their people. Rights of underrepresented people, in this case, people of LGBT community, are more warranted than ever before, thus even having a worldwide impact. Public servants are to work in tandem with the public for an ameliorated society that guarantees higher quality of life of everyone in the society.

All in all, while cleaving to one’s judgment is needed for an effective politician, the virtue of an ability to focus on the people’s needs is integral for government officials. Although extremely difficult, maintaining balance between the two will enhance security and welfare of a country.

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Average: 6 (4 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 178, Rule ID: IS_COMPRISED_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprises' or 'consists of' or 'is composed of'?
Suggestion: comprises; consists of; is composed of
...ers is to ameliorate their society that is comprised of people who trusted and voted them. Gove...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'still', 'thus', 'well', 'while']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.265934065934 0.240241500013 111% => OK
Verbs: 0.142857142857 0.157235817809 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0967032967033 0.0880659088768 110% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0373626373626 0.0497285424764 75% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0417582417582 0.0444667217837 94% => OK
Prepositions: 0.118681318681 0.12292977631 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0395604395604 0.0406280797675 97% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.01281505601 2.79330140395 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0417582417582 0.030933414821 135% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0703296703297 0.0997080785238 71% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0153846153846 0.0249443105267 62% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0175824175824 0.0148568991511 118% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2549.0 2732.02544248 93% => OK
No of words: 393.0 452.878318584 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.48600508906 6.0361032391 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.58838876751 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.450381679389 0.366273622748 123% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.36641221374 0.280924506359 130% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.254452926209 0.200843997647 127% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.173027989822 0.132149295362 131% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01281505601 2.79330140395 108% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 219.290929204 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582697201018 0.48968727796 119% => OK
Word variations: 69.01903096 55.4138127331 125% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6194690265 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.6842105263 23.380412469 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9063646579 59.4972553346 59% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.157894737 141.124799967 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6842105263 23.380412469 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.473684210526 0.674092028746 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 57.3254319004 51.4728631049 111% => OK
Elegance: 1.91089108911 1.64882698954 116% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3070863288 0.391690518653 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.103184055655 0.123202303941 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0516678221801 0.077325440228 67% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.469043136266 0.547984918172 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.141605529357 0.149214159877 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111757578528 0.161403998019 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653863149501 0.0892212321368 73% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.324658571253 0.385218514788 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0633882988459 0.0692045440612 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219265973487 0.275328986314 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052561579496 0.0653680567796 80% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.4325221239 58% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88274336283 184% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 4.0 7.22455752212 55% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.70907079646 221% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 13.5995575221 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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flaws:
Don't try to argue half to half. Better to always support/against one side. and better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 393 350
No. of Characters: 2075 1500
No. of Different Words: 229 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.452 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.28 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.816 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 174 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 135 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.684 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.74 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.316 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.469 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.065 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5