The increasingly rapid pace of life today causes more problems than it solves.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
In the era of post-industrial, people’s pace of lives has been accelerated nonstop. Such a modern lifestyle is cherished by some people while is detested by others. The given statement obviously support the latter viewpoint, accusing the fast pace of life is creating more challenges to people than it solves. I tend to agree with such a statement due to the two following reasons.
Firstly, solely the fast pace of life solves much less social problems for humans than people normally assume. Problems that inflicted humans for centries, like epidemics, poverty, hunger, hygiene issues, are mostly mitigated by the power of technology advancement, rather than a faster pace of life. For instance, an industrious farmer’s output is very likely to be lower than a work-life balanced teacher’s output. In this case, working from 5 am to 10 pm nonstop could hardly save one from poverty. But knowledge and technology can. Therefore, it is not rational to attribute the disappearance of certain social problems to a faster pace of life. In fact, the benefit of fast pace lifestyle is very limited.
Secondly, a pushy and pressing lifestyle creates tons of problems for us both psychologically and physically. In terms of mental health, research has consistently shown that too much stress harms people’s productivity and may cause serious mental illnesses. The increasing stress of missing deadlines and the rocketing fear of being inferior to others lead people to depression and anxiety. No wonder suicide cases are becoming more and more common these days. In terms of physical health, a tight working schedule often leaves people with limited time to do physical exercises, which in turn brings threats to people’s health. Research has shown that the average time for outdoor exercises in the U.S. plummeted as people are increasingly occupied with more workload. Such a result verifies the idea that a faster pace of life harms people’s physical health.
Of course, there are both pros and cons of a rapid pace of life. But with the above analysis, I believe that the negative impacts outweigh the benefits it brings along.
Comments
Scores by essay e-grader: 3…
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 285, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'peopling'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: peopling
...ace of life is creating more challenges to people than it solves. I tend to agree with su...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, in fact, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1799.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 347.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18443804035 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80705548537 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57060518732 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.5410171116 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.95 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.35 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195410862116 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573038802169 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425152311172 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112901852183 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195371597979 0.0667264976115 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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